Private collectors have been selling and buying fossils, the petrified remains of ancient organisms, ever since the eighteenth century. In recent years, however, the sale of fossils, particularly of dinosaurs and other large vertebrates, has grown into a big business. Rare and important fossils are now being sold to private ownership for millions of dollars. This is an unfortunate development for both scientists and the general public.
The public suffers because fossils that would otherwise be donated to museums where everyone can see them are sold to private collectors who do not allow the public to view their collections. Making it harder for the public to see fossils can lead to a decline in public interest in fossils, which would be a pity.
More importantly, scientists are likely to lose access to some of the most important fossils and thereby miss out on potentially crucial discoveries about extinct life forms. Wealthy fossil buyers with a desire to own the rarest and most important fossils can spend virtually limitless amounts of money to acquire them. Scientists and the museums and universities they work for often cannot compete successfully for fossils against millionaire fossil buyers.
Moreover, commercial fossil collectors often destroy valuable scientific evidence associated with the fossils they unearth. Most commercial fossil collectors are untrained or uninterested in carrying out the careful field work and documentation that reveal the most about animal life in the past. For example, scientists have learned about the biology of nest-building dinosaurs called oviraptors by carefully observing the exact position of oviraptor fossils in the ground and the presence of other fossils in the immediate surroundings. Commercial fossil collectors typically pay no attention to how fossils lie in the ground or to the smaller fossils that may surround bigger ones.
While the passage discourages the privatisation of fossils,the lecture states the opposing views.
Firstly,the passage states that privatisation will decrease the interest of public in fossils.Thi is because of the fact that private
owners won't make the fossils open to public like museums.However,the lecture argues that it will increase the public interest
in fossils.This is evident to the fact that more and more private institutions can buy fossils to display,which will encourage
many people.
Secondly,Passage claims that the scientist won't be able to research about those fossils as they are owned by private owners.The
lecture contradicts this and states it will have no effect for scientific discoveries.This is because the fossils first needs to be
examined by scientist before actually declaring them as fossils,this will give scientist plenty of time to work on it.
Finally,the lecture asserts that rich business people searching for fossils would degrade its scientific value.This is supported by
the assertion that these people don't have the required acdemic skills and concern about the evidence related to them.The lecture
challenges this claim by proving it beneficial of Science community.This is supported by the idea that as more people will go in
search of fossils would result in more fossil being found.
2 Independent Writing D
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...rease the interest of public in fossils.Thi is because of the fact that private ow...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, finally, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 10.4613686534 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 5.04856512141 178% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 7.30242825607 41% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 12.0772626932 75% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 22.412803532 112% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 30.3222958057 89% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 5.01324503311 100% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1166.0 1373.03311258 85% => OK
No of words: 208.0 270.72406181 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.60576923077 5.08290768461 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.79765784423 4.04702891845 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.18045470959 2.5805825403 123% => OK
Unique words: 119.0 145.348785872 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.572115384615 0.540411800872 106% => OK
syllable_count: 352.8 419.366225166 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.55342163355 109% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 3.25607064018 154% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.23620309051 85% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 5.0 13.0662251656 38% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 41.0 21.2450331126 193% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 175.054962797 49.2860985944 355% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 233.2 110.228320801 212% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 41.6 21.698381199 192% => OK
Discourse Markers: 14.2 7.06452816374 201% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 12.0 4.09492273731 293% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 17.0 4.19205298013 406% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 4.33554083885 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 4.45695364238 45% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.27373068433 23% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0984630653049 0.272083759551 36% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0459815500237 0.0996497079465 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0375817737 0.0662205650399 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0428647362687 0.162205337803 26% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0416055456109 0.0443174109184 94% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 25.8 13.3589403974 193% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 21.4 53.8541721854 40% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 5.55761589404 202% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 20.5 11.0289183223 186% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.15 12.2367328918 132% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.0 8.42419426049 119% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 63.6247240618 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 10.7273730684 177% => OK
gunning_fog: 18.4 10.498013245 175% => OK
text_standard: 19.0 11.2008830022 170% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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