Privatization of the artwork
The author of the reading and the lecturer both are about the collection of the artworks by the individuals. The reading article suggests that the private collections of artwork is harmful practice to the artists themselves and the genera public whereas the lecturer casts doubt on this idea of the reading passage by providing the logically convincing reasons and the examples.
First of all, the reading passage states that public is hurted by the private collections since the artworks will be hidden from them to see. However the lecturer disputes this idea and mentions that actually, private collections will be beneficial to the general public since the private individual who owns the money will arrange the exhibition that may cost a lot of money to the museums. Hence, privatization of art work will provide the public a platform to explore the artworks.
Secondly, the reading’s author claims that artists will not be able to see the artwork of fellow artists since all the artwork will be privatized and will not be available at the museums. Nevertheless, the lecturer contradicts with this thought in the reading passage and he suggests that artists do not need to travel different part the world to see the artwork of their fellow artist rather he/she can see every work at a place where an individual has collected the artwork. In addition, he believes the privatization will relatively reduce the cost of artist to visit different parts of the world and makes them easier and allow them to study more artwork at single place.
Finally, the reading passage mentions that preservation of the artwork will be worst since the museums will hire expert to preserve them but private individual wont do that. On other hand , the lecturer refutes this idea by mentioning that individual can have enough funding to preserve them whereas the museum does not have. He adds, the preservation will be better at the individual place than that in museums. Although, the reading passage and the lecturer both are about the privatization of the artworks the lecturer has effectively challenged the main idea of the reading passage by providing crucial reasons.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 121, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...artworks by the individuals. The reading article suggests that the private collec...
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Line 2, column 142, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...tworks will be hidden from them to see. However the lecturer disputes this idea and men...
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Line 2, column 256, Rule ID: GENERAL_XX[1]
Message: Use simply 'public'.
Suggestion: public
...e collections will be beneficial to the general public since the private individual who owns t...
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Line 2, column 346, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ns the money will arrange the exhibition that may cost a lot of money to the muse...
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Line 5, column 188, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...e individual wont do that. On other hand , the lecturer refutes this idea by menti...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, finally, first, hence, however, if, may, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, whereas, in addition, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 10.4613686534 105% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 5.04856512141 297% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 10.0 7.30242825607 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 12.0772626932 99% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 22.412803532 116% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 30.3222958057 158% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 5.01324503311 160% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1813.0 1373.03311258 132% => OK
No of words: 357.0 270.72406181 132% => OK
Chars per words: 5.07843137255 5.08290768461 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34677393335 4.04702891845 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68896354613 2.5805825403 104% => OK
Unique words: 153.0 145.348785872 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.428571428571 0.540411800872 79% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 555.3 419.366225166 132% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.23620309051 109% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 13.0662251656 92% => OK
Sentence length: 29.0 21.2450331126 137% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 64.4103058524 49.2860985944 131% => OK
Chars per sentence: 151.083333333 110.228320801 137% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.75 21.698381199 137% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.5 7.06452816374 149% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 4.19205298013 119% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 4.33554083885 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 4.45695364238 45% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.27373068433 94% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.327369480877 0.272083759551 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.155732590115 0.0996497079465 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0798308303658 0.0662205650399 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.24101343257 0.162205337803 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.038414232595 0.0443174109184 87% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.4 13.3589403974 130% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.04 53.8541721854 78% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 11.0289183223 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.78 12.2367328918 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.91 8.42419426049 94% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 63.6247240618 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.7273730684 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.498013245 130% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.2008830022 125% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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