Scientists are considering the possibility of sending humans to Mars in the coming decades Although there have been successful manned missions to the Moon in the 1960s and 1970s Mars is 150 times further away from Earth than the Moon is Thus the project o

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Scientists are considering the possibility of sending humans to Mars in the coming decades. Although there have been successful manned missions to the Moon in the 1960s and 1970s, Mars is 150 times further away from Earth than the Moon is. Thus the project of sending humans to Mars would require solving an array of problems the Moon missions did not have to face.

The listening content contradicts the article on the topic of whether humans have the possibility of traveling to Mars. Firstly, the article says that astronauts have difficulty bringing enough food, water, and oxygen for their trip to Mars because of the distance between Mars and Earth. However, the speaker points out that astronauts can utilize a technique called hipenplant to solve this problem. Through this technique humans can cultivate plant crops by water which allow people to grow plants with relatively small space. In addition, this technique not only provides people food but also releases fresh oxygen.

Secondly, the author mentions that the zero-gravity environment on Mars is harmful to human beings. Likewise, the speaker refutes it and argues that people can avoid this harm by some technique. For example, regular exercise prevents astronauts’ muscle mass from decreasing. And vitamins benefit people to slow down the speed of lowering bone density.

Lastly, the author supposes that because of space radiation on Mars, astronauts will be exposed to danger during their mission. Nevertheless, the speaker argues that the radiation is not always so strong. As a result, people can build a small shield which doesn't add much weight to a spaceship. By this, astronauts can prevent themselves from being attacked by radiation when space radiation is strong and complete their regular mission outside the shield when space radiation is not harmful.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 588, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... technique not only provides people food but also releases fresh oxygen. Seco...
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Line 5, column 257, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
..., people can build a small shield which doesnt add much weight to a spaceship. By this...
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Line 5, column 376, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...es from being attacked by radiation when space radiation is strong and complete t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, lastly, likewise, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, for example, in addition, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 10.4613686534 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 5.04856512141 119% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 7.30242825607 82% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 12.0772626932 83% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 22.412803532 71% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 30.3222958057 99% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 5.01324503311 160% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1249.0 1373.03311258 91% => OK
No of words: 230.0 270.72406181 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.43043478261 5.08290768461 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.89432290496 4.04702891845 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60107946183 2.5805825403 101% => OK
Unique words: 142.0 145.348785872 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.617391304348 0.540411800872 114% => OK
syllable_count: 366.3 419.366225166 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 3.25607064018 31% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.23620309051 85% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 13.0662251656 99% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 21.2450331126 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.180851435 49.2860985944 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.0769230769 110.228320801 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.6923076923 21.698381199 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0769230769 7.06452816374 143% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.09492273731 73% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 4.19205298013 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 4.33554083885 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.27373068433 47% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.089692944222 0.272083759551 33% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0320673781337 0.0996497079465 32% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.041873541331 0.0662205650399 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0603105940206 0.162205337803 37% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0277386442907 0.0443174109184 63% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 13.3589403974 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 53.8541721854 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.0289183223 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.92 12.2367328918 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.87 8.42419426049 105% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 63.6247240618 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.7273730684 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.498013245 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum four paragraphs wanted. The correct pattern:

para 1: introduction
para 2: doubt 1
para 3: doubt 2
para 4: doubt 3

Less contents wanted from the reading passages(25%), more content wanted from the lecture (75%).

Don't need a conclusion paragraph.

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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