Some parents forbid young children from owning smart phones (cell phones with Internet access), while others disagree and believe that they are important tools for keeping in touch. Which point of view do you think is better, and why?
With the advancement in the technology, some of the devices have become inevitable part of our lives and smartphones, are one of them. But I agree with parents who forbid their kids from owning a smartphone. I have two compelling reasons to support this claim, which I will elaborate upon in my further essay.
To start with, I want to focus on the well-known and widely experienced result from the usage of smartphones - wastage of time and lack of physical activity. There have been various studies an experiments with have showcased the above-mentioned effect from the usage of smartphones. I have a very convinving example which is from my own life's experience. Few years back, when the hype of smartphone started, my parents gifted me a smartphone- which ultimetely turned into a curse for me rather than boon. I started using the smartphones and it's various attractive features, almost all the time. Due to this, my studies suffered and my grades detoriated. Since my physical activities also started diminishing, I lost the badmintion matches, which used to be one of my forte. Soon, my parents realised that smartphones is not good for me and they asked me to limit my time for using smartphone.
Secondly, another reason which is more scientific and proved by various researchers all over the world- the radiations from smartphones weakeness the cells of the brain, and especially, children. As an adolosent, a child's brain has more capability to learn quickly than adults. This learning ability is hindered when a child is exposed more to the radiations from the smartphones which weakeness the brain cells. For instance, their have been studies which showcase difference between two child- initally who had same IQ levels. But one was allowed to use smartphones and other was not allowed. After studying them for months, their were evident results which showed that the kid who was not allowed to use the smartphone was able to learn and understand things better than his peer, who had access to the smartphone.
At the end, I would like to conclude with the notion that, there might be instances when smartphones have proved their worth like for example with the use of GPS in smartphones, you can easily locate your kid even if he gets lost in the crowd. But one should always weigh the various pros and cons of smartphones before coming to the conclusion. Thus, I strongly feel that parents should forbid their kids from using smartphones till certain age atleast.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, second, secondly, so, thus, well, for example, for instance, to start with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 10.4613686534 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 5.04856512141 119% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 7.30242825607 192% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 12.0772626932 157% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 22.412803532 192% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 57.0 30.3222958057 188% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 5.01324503311 100% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2069.0 1373.03311258 151% => OK
No of words: 418.0 270.72406181 154% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.94976076555 5.08290768461 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52162009685 4.04702891845 112% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74994193876 2.5805825403 107% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 145.348785872 155% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.540669856459 0.540411800872 100% => OK
syllable_count: 630.9 419.366225166 150% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 3.25607064018 430% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 8.23620309051 12% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 1.25165562914 320% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.51434878587 264% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 2.5761589404 194% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 13.0662251656 153% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 21.2450331126 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.2283201013 49.2860985944 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.45 110.228320801 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9 21.698381199 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.45 7.06452816374 63% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 4.19205298013 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 4.33554083885 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.27373068433 187% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.142309445947 0.272083759551 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0483756234794 0.0996497079465 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0385037513403 0.0662205650399 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0935815159868 0.162205337803 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0168883035124 0.0443174109184 38% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 13.3589403974 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 53.8541721854 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.0289183223 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.43 12.2367328918 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.03 8.42419426049 95% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 63.6247240618 141% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.7273730684 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.498013245 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.2008830022 89% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 68.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.5 Out of 30
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