Some parents offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school. Do you think this is a good idea?
There are many different ways for parents to raise their children and it is significant to choose which way. Raising school-going children is very sensitive and complex because a large part of their personality is formed and grows during these days. Personally, I believe that providing money for excellent marks is a great thought. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, giving money would encourage kids to study hard to get good marks. Money is an effective incentive tool that could lead children to study during the academic year and planning to get good marks at the end of the semester. In this case, kids’ enthusiasm is much stronger than before, so they can get amazing results. My personal experience is a compelling example of this. When I was in elementary school on the first day of the academic year my mother told me that if I get a great grade, she will give me money to buy my favorite bicycle. After that, I was very impressed and my motivation multiplied. I planned to study continuously throughout the semester therefore I could get great results at the end of the school year, which fortunately happened.
Moreover, this concept can give kids insight into how to handle financial matters in the future. Unfortunately, teaching life skills as financial issues, communication, etc therefore it is a parent’s responsibility to educate their children in this context. For instance, some research shows youngsters who were learned financial matters in childhood, is more prosperous in their life than others.
In conclusion, I am of the opinion that giving money to children by parents is a fantastic idea. This not only motivates them to study hard for the excellent result but also teach them how to deal with financial matters in future.
Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
There are many different ways for parents to raise their childre...
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... will explore in the following essay. First of all, giving money would encoura...
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...hool year, which fortunately happened. Moreover, this concept can give kids ins...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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...prosperous in their life than others. In conclusion, I am of the opinion that ...
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Line 6, column 221, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...them how to deal with financial matters in future.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, moreover, so, therefore, thus, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 10.4613686534 134% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 5.04856512141 139% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 7.30242825607 82% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 12.0772626932 83% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 22.412803532 165% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 40.0 30.3222958057 132% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 5.01324503311 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1520.0 1373.03311258 111% => OK
No of words: 307.0 270.72406181 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.95114006515 5.08290768461 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18585898806 4.04702891845 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80475887118 2.5805825403 109% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 145.348785872 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.57003257329 0.540411800872 105% => OK
syllable_count: 465.3 419.366225166 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 3.25607064018 276% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 8.23620309051 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 13.0662251656 122% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 21.2450331126 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.708017307 49.2860985944 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.0 110.228320801 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1875 21.698381199 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.375 7.06452816374 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 4.19205298013 119% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 4.33554083885 300% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 4.45695364238 22% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.27373068433 47% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.29923282592 0.272083759551 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0883541430591 0.0996497079465 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0410621847583 0.0662205650399 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.16035045543 0.162205337803 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0362806683424 0.0443174109184 82% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 13.3589403974 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 53.8541721854 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.0289183223 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.43 12.2367328918 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.18 8.42419426049 97% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 63.6247240618 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.7273730684 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.498013245 91% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.2008830022 89% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 11, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
There are many different ways for parents to raise their childre...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... will explore in the following essay. First of all, giving money would encoura...
^^^^^
Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...hool year, which fortunately happened. Moreover, this concept can give kids ins...
^^^
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...prosperous in their life than others. In conclusion, I am of the opinion that ...
^^^^
Line 6, column 221, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...them how to deal with financial matters in future.
^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, moreover, so, therefore, thus, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 10.4613686534 134% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 5.04856512141 139% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 7.30242825607 82% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 12.0772626932 83% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 22.412803532 165% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 40.0 30.3222958057 132% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 5.01324503311 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1520.0 1373.03311258 111% => OK
No of words: 307.0 270.72406181 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.95114006515 5.08290768461 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18585898806 4.04702891845 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80475887118 2.5805825403 109% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 145.348785872 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.57003257329 0.540411800872 105% => OK
syllable_count: 465.3 419.366225166 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 3.25607064018 276% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 8.23620309051 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 13.0662251656 122% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 21.2450331126 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.708017307 49.2860985944 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.0 110.228320801 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1875 21.698381199 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.375 7.06452816374 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 4.19205298013 119% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 4.33554083885 300% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 4.45695364238 22% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.27373068433 47% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.29923282592 0.272083759551 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0883541430591 0.0996497079465 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0410621847583 0.0662205650399 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.16035045543 0.162205337803 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0362806683424 0.0443174109184 82% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 13.3589403974 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 53.8541721854 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.0289183223 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.43 12.2367328918 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.18 8.42419426049 97% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 63.6247240618 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.7273730684 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.498013245 91% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.2008830022 89% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.