Some parents offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school. Do you think this is a good idea?
By and large, parents play a key role in the cultivation of their children's mind and soul. Raising school-going children is very sensitive and complex because a large part of their personality is formed and grows during these days. Some people believe it is a best idea to offer money to the children for every high grade that they receive in school but some others beg to differ and claim that this approach acts adversely on children Personally, I believe that providing money for excellent marks is a great attitude. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, it is worth considering that giving money would encourage kids to study hard to obtain good marks. Money is an effective incentive tool that could lead children to boost their efforts during the academic year and planning to gain good grades at the end of the semester. In addition to that, by providing money to them parents can convey them how much love their children and their achievements are significant for them. My personal experience is a compelling example of this. When I was in elementary school on the first day of the academic year my mother told me that if I get a great grade, she will give me money to buy my favorite bicycle. After that, I was very impressed and my motivation multiplied. I planned to study continuously throughout the semester therefore I could obtain excellent results at the end of the school year, which fortunately happened.
Secondly, let me take a look at this concept that giving money as prize to kids can give insight into how to handle financial matters in the future. Unfortunately, teaching life skills as financial issues, communication, etc not educated in schools, therefore it is the parent’s responsibility to teach their children in these contexts. For instance, research has found that youngsters who were learned financial matters in childhood, is more prosperous in their life than others.
In conclusion, I am of the opinion that giving money to children by parents is a fantastic idea. This not only stimulates them to study hard for the excellent results but also teach them how to deal with financial matters in future.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, second, secondly, so, therefore, for instance, i feel, in addition, in conclusion, by and large, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1834.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 376.0 407.700716846 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.87765957447 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40348946061 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74561746966 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.531914893617 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 561.6 618.680645161 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.9755272258 48.9658058833 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.625 100.406767564 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5 20.6045352989 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.5625 5.45110844103 157% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.349105309572 0.236089414692 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0983110231313 0.076458572812 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0818775786881 0.0737576698707 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.201278874748 0.150856017488 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.110744136464 0.0645574589148 172% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 11.7677419355 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.32 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.09 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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