Sudden declining of sea otters
The reading and the lecture both are about the sudden declining of sea otters. While the author of the article asserts that the cause of declining of sea otters mainly because of two reasons: the environmental pollution or attacks of predators, The lecturer disputes the claims mentioned in the article . His position is that the predictor is most likely the cause of upsurge in declining rate of sea otters.
According to the reading, after the investigation, pollution seemed more likely cause of sea otters death along the Alaskan coast. The author mentions that the increase of chemical level in the sea water caused by the oils rigs and other sources of chemical pollution are responsible for polluting the sea water, which lead to life threatening infection in sea otters and indirectly cause deaths. This particular argument is challenged by the lecturer. He claims that the pollution theory is dwindle by the fact that, no one can find any dead seas otters along the Alaskan coast. So, the pollution is not causing any infection to sea otters
Secondly, the author mentions that the whatever had effecting the sea otters also effecting the other mammals. He goes, on to say that the uneven concentration of pollutant along the coast cause the uneven declining of sea otters. The lecturer, however, asserts that, human hunters is responsible of the death of the other sea mammals and if the proper diet is not available to the oscars then they have to change their diet from large mammals to smaller mammals. He also said that the uneven death of sea otters is not because of the pollution, but because of the location. The location where sea otters are stable may be shallow and rocky and oscars are bigger in size that’s why they cannot eat the sea otters.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 303, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...utes the claims mentioned in the article . His position is that the predictor is m...
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Line 2, column 94, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'otters'' or 'otter's'?
Suggestion: otters'; otter's
...llution seemed more likely cause of sea otters death along the Alaskan coast. The auth...
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Line 2, column 492, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'dwindled'.
Suggestion: dwindled
... He claims that the pollution theory is dwindle by the fact that, no one can find any d...
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Line 3, column 268, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...rs. The lecturer, however, asserts that, human hunters is responsible of the deat...
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Line 3, column 646, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... are stable may be shallow and rocky and oscars are bigger in size that’s why the...
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Line 3, column 659, Rule ID: ADJECTIVE_IN_ATTRIBUTE[1]
Message: A more concise phrase may lose no meaning and sound more powerful.
Suggestion: bigger
...ay be shallow and rocky and oscars are bigger in size that’s why they cannot eat the sea otte...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 10.4613686534 124% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 5.04856512141 59% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 7.30242825607 110% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 12.0772626932 99% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 22.412803532 80% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 30.3222958057 132% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 5.01324503311 279% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1469.0 1373.03311258 107% => OK
No of words: 302.0 270.72406181 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.8642384106 5.08290768461 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1687104957 4.04702891845 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51141020408 2.5805825403 97% => OK
Unique words: 143.0 145.348785872 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.473509933775 0.540411800872 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 457.2 419.366225166 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 3.25607064018 154% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.23620309051 85% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 13.0662251656 92% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 21.2450331126 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.9844850659 49.2860985944 126% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.416666667 110.228320801 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.1666666667 21.698381199 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.16666666667 7.06452816374 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.09492273731 73% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 4.19205298013 143% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 4.33554083885 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 4.45695364238 135% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.27373068433 94% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.440692325437 0.272083759551 162% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.174085287487 0.0996497079465 175% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0898304484354 0.0662205650399 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.313027060188 0.162205337803 193% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.064738504619 0.0443174109184 146% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 13.3589403974 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 53.8541721854 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.0289183223 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 12.2367328918 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.07 8.42419426049 96% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 63.6247240618 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.7273730684 98% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.498013245 114% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.2008830022 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted. The correct pattern:
para 1: introduction
para 2: doubt 1
para 3: doubt 2
para 4: doubt 3
Less contents wanted from the reading passages(25%), more content wanted from the lecture (75%).
Don't need a conclusion paragraph.
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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