Summarize the points made in the lecture being sure to explain how they cast doubt on the specific points made in the reading passage

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Summarize the points made in the lecture, being sure to explain how they cast doubt on the specific points made in the reading passage.

The reading and the lecture offer two oposing views on the benefits of the electronic-based records in comparison to the paper-based recording systems. Whereas the author of the reading states that recording the patients' data through computer is very productive, the lecturer disputes that this progress could not have any certainty. She casts doubt on the main points made in the text by providing the three reasons.
First, according to the text, recroding data in the computers will decrease the costs of keeping data in storages. However, the lecture asserts that owing to the necessary use of paper-based records, for later's uses, doctors should pay for storage places to keep their papers there. Therefore they cannot save money. She explaines that for backing up the recods and many legal usage of their records, they must keep their papers.
Secondly, presently most doctors use the traditional taking notes using papers and then their staff transfer their handwriting papers to the electronic records. Hence, based on the lecture, the erros due to the poor doctors' handwriting is still remaind because it would be difficult for their staffs to read them. While, the author of the text calims that with computer use for recording, the erros are diminished.
Finally, the text alleges that for researchers it is easier to access to the computer's files and collect their needed data. Nevertheless, the lecturer argues that due to the parivacy laws it's actually, difficult for researcher to have any access to the patients' records. They should follow very severe regulations to have a permission to access to a patient's data. As the lecturer says, the patients might not be comfortable to accompany any reseraches.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 213, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'patients'' or 'patient's'?
Suggestion: patients'; patient's
...f the reading states that recording the patients data through computer is very productiv...
^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 283, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...rage places to keep their papers there. Therefore they cannot save money. She explaines t...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 188, Rule ID: IT_IS[6]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
...er argues that due to the parivacy laws its actually, difficult for researcher to h...
^^^
Line 4, column 350, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'patients'' or 'patient's'?
Suggestion: patients'; patient's
...ons to have a permission to access to a patients data. As the lecturer says, the patient...
^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, finally, first, hence, however, if, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, still, then, therefore, whereas, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 10.4613686534 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 5.04856512141 158% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 7.30242825607 55% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 12.0772626932 58% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 22.412803532 107% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 30.3222958057 109% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 5.01324503311 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1444.0 1373.03311258 105% => OK
No of words: 279.0 270.72406181 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.17562724014 5.08290768461 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08696624509 4.04702891845 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6642278901 2.5805825403 103% => OK
Unique words: 154.0 145.348785872 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.551971326165 0.540411800872 102% => OK
syllable_count: 438.3 419.366225166 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 3.25607064018 123% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.23620309051 109% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 13.0662251656 107% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 21.2450331126 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.0541878911 49.2860985944 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.142857143 110.228320801 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.9285714286 21.698381199 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.57142857143 7.06452816374 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 4.19205298013 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 4.33554083885 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 4.45695364238 179% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.133123274312 0.272083759551 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.051421799633 0.0996497079465 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.067462479344 0.0662205650399 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0818869189271 0.162205337803 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0638128067567 0.0443174109184 144% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 13.3589403974 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 53.8541721854 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.0289183223 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.76 12.2367328918 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.22 8.42419426049 109% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 63.6247240618 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.7273730684 103% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.498013245 91% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.2008830022 116% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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