Technology has made children less creative than they were in the past.

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Technology has made children less creative than they were in the past.

In these days technological development rapidly grow all around the world. Every one effected by technological development, especially children. As a direct consequence of the observation, it is absolutely imperative that children should stay away from the technologly until they grow blue age because they loose some of their creative abilities. Of the numerous positive aspect of this perhaps most appealing ones are improving hand craft abilities, having social game, learning real world.

First substantial benefits of staying away from the technology until blue ages, improving hand craft technique. Inasmuch as daily kids plays with their computer all day long, they don't even use the create something with their hand , and most of them don't know how to use tools. We have to help the how funny is using tools and create something with your own ability. When I was a little child ı always use my dad's tools and ı try to create my own toys, it was fund and more creative.

Not only is improving hand craft ability a major point but also having a social game is crucial attraction for creative thinking, due to fact that most of the commercial and some fundation still try to use old method game the bring all childeren together. They started to connect each other only by comtuper and computer games. İf they play together on the street or in back yard they could improve their imagination to creative new game. For example, in my chilhood we had maybe 1000 games to play on the street with our friends and we were creating new games and new rules that makes us more creative and more social.

In Addition, learning about the real world is also important factor for the creative. İf we keep away our children from the tecnologly for a while they will realese the world has important problems maybe they can create a new method to rule better, in our daily life most of the children live in computer they dont even want to smeel outside.

In conclusion after elaborating extensively, I can say technological development good for our world, but if want to improve our world a place we have to keep away our children from the technology for a while, because they loosing their creative abilities. Actually even though some people advocate technology good for children improvement, the vast majority thing that technology kills our children creative abilities

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, if, may, so, still, while, for example, in addition, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 10.4613686534 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 5.04856512141 99% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 7.30242825607 164% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 12.0772626932 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 43.0 22.412803532 192% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 30.3222958057 155% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 5.01324503311 199% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1977.0 1373.03311258 144% => OK
No of words: 401.0 270.72406181 148% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.93017456359 5.08290768461 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47492842339 4.04702891845 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59952629188 2.5805825403 101% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 145.348785872 144% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.521197007481 0.540411800872 96% => OK
syllable_count: 609.3 419.366225166 145% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 3.25607064018 184% => OK
Article: 1.0 8.23620309051 12% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 1.25165562914 320% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 2.5761589404 233% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 13.0662251656 122% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 21.2450331126 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 65.267448577 49.2860985944 132% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.5625 110.228320801 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0625 21.698381199 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.875 7.06452816374 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 4.19205298013 262% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 4.33554083885 300% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 4.45695364238 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.215707965027 0.272083759551 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0802561388736 0.0996497079465 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0717794958744 0.0662205650399 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.133963144708 0.162205337803 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0629299555416 0.0443174109184 142% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 13.3589403974 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 53.8541721854 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.0289183223 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.61 12.2367328918 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.63 8.42419426049 91% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 63.6247240618 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.7273730684 98% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.498013245 114% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.2008830022 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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