TOEFL integrated writing: Chevalier de Seingalt
For a long time, there has been debate on the accuracy of the historical Chevalier de Seingalt's memoir. The writer of the passage, while noting the memoir's valuable historical significance, raises doubt on its accuracy due to several reasons. The lecturer quickly refutes these claims providing proofs explained further below.
To begin with, the writer of the passage states that newly found evidence suggests that the Chevalier was not as wealthy as he claimed to be in his memoir as he borrowed money from a Swiss merchant. The lecturer obviously doesn't agree with the author. She explains that the wealth the Chevalier owned was mostly assets which couldn't be used to pay for the parties and gambling he used to spend. Thus until the assets would be converted into cash, he had borrowed the money from the Swiss merchant. THis refutes the claim that the Chevalier was poor.
The author of the passage further adds that it is impossible for anyone to accurately capture their conversations from the many years later. He agrees that the conversations between the Chevalier and Voltaire undoubtedly happened, however, there is no evidence of how accurately they are noted. The lecturer easily refutes the author's claim by providing proof that the Chevalier wrote down the conversations between him and Voltaire. In fact, when the memoir was written he referred to these notes that he had safely, and this has been confirmed by the witnesses living with the Chevalier many years later.
To conclude his stance the author adds that the incident of his escape from the Venetian prison is overly dramatic and seems to be added for readers to enjoy. He believes that the Chevalier never actually made a daring escape but in fact bribed his politically powerful friends and escaped. Not all experts agree with this theory. The lecturer points out that other prisoners of the jail had much more politically powerful friends and yet were unable to escape the prison. She also brings to our attention the old records of the Venetian government which states that the jail roof of which the Chevalier was in had to be repaired thus proving the written incident was indeed true.
Thus we can clearly understand that the author of the passage and lecturer are unable to find a common ground.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
... Swiss merchant. The lecturer obviously doesnt agree with the author. She explains tha...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: couldn't
...Chevalier owned was mostly assets which couldnt be used to pay for the parties and gamb...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
... parties and gambling he used to spend. Thus until the assets would be converted int...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
... the written incident was indeed true. Thus we can clearly understand that the auth...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, however, if, so, thus, while, in fact, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 10.4613686534 182% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 5.04856512141 40% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 7.30242825607 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 12.0772626932 141% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 22.412803532 174% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 30.3222958057 155% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 5.01324503311 100% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1906.0 1373.03311258 139% => OK
No of words: 384.0 270.72406181 142% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.96354166667 5.08290768461 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4267276788 4.04702891845 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47063922087 2.5805825403 96% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 145.348785872 132% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.540411800872 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 585.0 419.366225166 139% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 3.25607064018 184% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.23620309051 85% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 13.0662251656 138% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 21.2450331126 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.2351744673 49.2860985944 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.888888889 110.228320801 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3333333333 21.698381199 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.05555555556 7.06452816374 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 4.19205298013 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 4.33554083885 254% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.102829045869 0.272083759551 38% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0372744309976 0.0996497079465 37% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0551053133595 0.0662205650399 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0560214417353 0.162205337803 35% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0367176736354 0.0443174109184 83% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 13.3589403974 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 53.8541721854 109% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.0289183223 93% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 12.2367328918 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.89 8.42419426049 94% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 63.6247240618 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.7273730684 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.498013245 99% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.2008830022 71% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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