TOEFL TPO 30 - Integrated Writing Task

 The reading suspects that the story of the burning mirror is just a myth and the Greeks never really biult such a device because of three reasons, and the speaker claims that the points made in the reading are unconvincing.
 Firstly, even though the reading suggests that the ancient Greeks were not technologically advanced enough to make a burning mirror, the speaker argues that they didn't need to make a big single copper which have to be several meters wide, they were able to make a dozen of small polished copper. By corporating these small polished mirrors together into a large one, it is possible to get the same efficiency. Obviously, the speaker's argument disproves its counterpart in the reading.
 Moreover, despite the statement in the reading that the burning mirror would have taken a long time to set the ships on fire, the speaker contends that despite the wooden object, the Roman also use other materials to make the device, such as a pitch, which is steaky and substaintial and burns quickly. It is true that it may take about 10 minutes to burn a wooden boat, while it can burn a pitch one in seconds. And once burning, it is long-lasting. In other words, the speaker refutes the reading's opinion.
 Finally, the speaker asserts that Romans are familiar with the fire. While the passage suggests that it doesn't seem like an improvement on a weapon that the Greeks already had:flaming arrow. The speaker explains that there is no doubt that they are familiar with fire enough to use the burning mirror effectively. Also there is a disadvantage of the flaming arrow that they can't see it when raising. Thus, it is absolutely an improvement to use burning mirror. Again, the speaker's opinion has totally jeopardized the reading's theory.

Votes
Average: 8 (1 vote)
Essay Categories

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 164, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...ng mirror, the speaker argues that they didnt need to make a big single copper which ...
^^^^^
Line 2, column 426, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'speakers'' or 'speaker's'?
Suggestion: speakers'; speaker's
...get the same efficiency. Obviously, the speakers argument disproves its counterpart in t...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 492, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'readings'' or 'reading's'?
Suggestion: readings'; reading's
...In other words, the speaker refutes the readings opinion.  Finally, the speaker asserts...
^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 105, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...ire. While the passage suggests that it doesnt seem like an improvement on a weapon th...
^^^^^^
Line 4, column 315, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
... to use the burning mirror effectively. Also there is a disadvantage of the flaming ...
^^^^
Line 4, column 375, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...dvantage of the flaming arrow that they cant see it when raising. Thus, it is absolu...
^^^^
Line 4, column 473, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'speakers'' or 'speaker's'?
Suggestion: speakers'; speaker's
...ement to use burning mirror. Again, the speakers opinion has totally jeopardized the rea...
^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 518, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'readings'' or 'reading's'?
Suggestion: readings'; reading's
...ers opinion has totally jeopardized the readings theory.
^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, firstly, may, moreover, really, second, so, thus, while, as to, no doubt, such as, in other words, it is true

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 10.4613686534 134% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 5.04856512141 79% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 7.30242825607 68% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 12.0772626932 132% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 22.412803532 120% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 30.0 30.3222958057 99% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.01324503311 80% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1466.0 1373.03311258 107% => OK
No of words: 300.0 270.72406181 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.88666666667 5.08290768461 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16179145029 4.04702891845 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60554963278 2.5805825403 101% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 145.348785872 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.55 0.540411800872 102% => OK
syllable_count: 449.1 419.366225166 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 3.25607064018 154% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.23620309051 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.25165562914 240% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 13.0662251656 107% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 21.2450331126 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 83.9544337053 49.2860985944 170% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.714285714 110.228320801 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4285714286 21.698381199 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.35714285714 7.06452816374 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 4.19205298013 191% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 4.33554083885 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 4.45695364238 179% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.387639482077 0.272083759551 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.112807576533 0.0996497079465 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0957520271277 0.0662205650399 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.220277523815 0.162205337803 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0424824857373 0.0443174109184 96% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 13.3589403974 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 53.8541721854 109% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.0289183223 93% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.08 12.2367328918 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.05 8.42419426049 96% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 63.6247240618 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 10.7273730684 168% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.498013245 99% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.2008830022 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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