TOEFL Writing Task 1

Essay topics

The reading and the lecture both deal with the use of wood products. The author of the reading believes that the consumption of wooden items must be decreased as it causes harm to the environment by changing globat climate, deforestation and wildlife destruction. The lecturer asts doubt on the claims made in the article She thinks that utilization of wooden products is not harmful in any way, as neither are animals affected nor it leads to reduction in number of trees.

First, the author points out that the popularity of wood commodities has contributed to rise in deforestation, specially in the Amazon forest; consequently causing global temperature rise. It is mentioned that the Amazon soaks up much amount of total CO2 present worldwide. This point is challenged by the lecturer she says that actual reason for deforestation is calling down of trees lur livestock and timber Furthermore, she argues that the companies do not only cut down the trees for manufacturing of their products, but also plant as many trees as are being cut down.

Secondly, the author contends that, there is another problematic issue raised due to production of wooden products, which is ruination of flora and fauna The artide notes that the increase in human activity adversely affects animal populations and can even result in the extinction of many species. The lecturer rebuts this argument. She suggests that the wildlife organisms have got so much space to live in the forests, that they can easily adjust themselves according to the human activity occuring in the wild, hy shifting themselves to the areas with no interruption by mankind.

Finally, the author asserts that the abolishment of plastic bags, as they are non biodegradable, has bloomed the use of paper bags. The article establishes that paper bags are equally harmful for the nature, because their manufacturing is degrading the forests. The lecturer on the other hand posits that paper bags are best replacement for plastic bags, as they do not harm in any way, like the plastic bags does.

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Average: 0.3 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 265, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...deforestation and wildlife destruction. The lecturer asts doubt on the claims made ...
^^^
Line 7, column 317, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[4]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'are the best'.
Suggestion: are the best
...n the other hand posits that paper bags are best replacement for plastic bags, as they d...
^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, finally, first, furthermore, if, second, secondly, so, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 10.4613686534 134% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 5.04856512141 59% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 7.30242825607 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 12.0772626932 116% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 22.412803532 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 44.0 30.3222958057 145% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 5.01324503311 299% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1722.0 1373.03311258 125% => OK
No of words: 339.0 270.72406181 125% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0796460177 5.08290768461 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29091512845 4.04702891845 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79617388973 2.5805825403 108% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 145.348785872 129% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.554572271386 0.540411800872 103% => OK
syllable_count: 531.0 419.366225166 127% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 3.25607064018 154% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.23620309051 109% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 1.25165562914 320% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 13.0662251656 92% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 21.2450331126 132% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 82.4150657074 49.2860985944 167% => OK
Chars per sentence: 143.5 110.228320801 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.25 21.698381199 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.08333333333 7.06452816374 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 4.45695364238 135% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.27373068433 47% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.272083759551 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.0996497079465 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0662205650399 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.162205337803 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0443174109184 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.6 13.3589403974 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 53.8541721854 80% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.0289183223 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.48 12.2367328918 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.26 8.42419426049 110% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 63.6247240618 143% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.7273730684 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.498013245 126% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.2008830022 134% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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