TPO-03 - Integrated Writing Task Rembrandt is the most famous of the seventeenth-century Dutch painters. However, there are doubts whether some paintings attributed to Rembrandt were actually painted by him. One such painting is known as attributed to Rem

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TPO-03 - Integrated Writing Task Rembrandt is the most famous of the seventeenth-century Dutch painters. However, there are doubts whether some paintings attributed to Rembrandt were actually painted by him. One such painting is known as attributed to Rem

The reading and lecture are both about Rembrandt painting on a old woman. The author of the reading believes that the style of painting of the woman's face is not a trademark of Rembrandt's work. The lecturer casts doubts about the claims made in the article. She thinks that the portrait of the old lady is in fact made by Rembrandt himself.

First of all, the author points out there is inconsistency in the detail in the portrait such as how the old woman is dressed. It also appears that the old woman is wearing a white linen collar applicable only for servants, but she is also wearing a expensive fur collar that no peasant lady can afford. The point is challenged by the lecturer. She says that lady is wearing a expensive clothing which could add up value to the portrait. Furthermore, She argues that it was intentional to show that the woman wear that kind of clothing to show the portrait is about aristocratic lady.

Secondly, the author contends that Rembrandt is a master of painting light and shadow, but in this particular painting his style does not add up. The article notes that the face appears to be illuminated by light onto it from below. The lecturer rebuts this argument. She suggests that when light and shadow is removed that it can be seen on the portrait. She elaborates on this by mentioning that simple lightning can color the clothing and the face being illuminated so the face is being seen clearly.

Finally, the author states that on carefully examining the back portion of the painting it can be seen that the portrait was painted on a panel wood that is glued together. The article established that Rembrandt does not use panel that is glued together that is formed to adhere together pieces of wood. By these reasons the painting was removed from Rembrandt's collection of painting in 1930s. The lecturer, on the other hand, posits that wood panel fur color made the portrait more valuable being a single piece of wood. She puts forth the idea that the old lady portrait wood is the same from Rembrandt's self portrait.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 62, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...re are both about Rembrandt painting on a old woman. The author of the reading be...
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Line 1, column 196, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...is not a trademark of Rembrandts work. The lecturer casts doubts about the claims ...
^^^
Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... is in fact made by Rembrandt himself. First of all, the author points out ther...
^^^
Line 3, column 249, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...y for servants, but she is also wearing a expensive fur collar that no peasant la...
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Line 3, column 376, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...lecturer. She says that lady is wearing a expensive clothing which could add up v...
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Line 7, column 386, Rule ID: IN_1990s[1]
Message: The article is probably missing here: 'in the 1930s'.
Suggestion: in the 1930s
... from Rembrandts collection of painting in 1930s. The lecturer, on the other hand, posit...
^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, furthermore, second, secondly, so, in fact, kind of, such as, first of all, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 10.4613686534 249% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 5.04856512141 99% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 7.30242825607 82% => OK
Relative clauses : 23.0 12.0772626932 190% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 22.412803532 174% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 30.3222958057 158% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 5.01324503311 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1701.0 1373.03311258 124% => OK
No of words: 363.0 270.72406181 134% => OK
Chars per words: 4.68595041322 5.08290768461 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3649236973 4.04702891845 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4720277881 2.5805825403 96% => OK
Unique words: 157.0 145.348785872 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.432506887052 0.540411800872 80% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 506.7 419.366225166 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.55342163355 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 3.25607064018 215% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 11.0 8.23620309051 134% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 13.0662251656 145% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 21.2450331126 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.7068203077 49.2860985944 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.5263157895 110.228320801 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1052631579 21.698381199 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.31578947368 7.06452816374 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 4.19205298013 143% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.27373068433 234% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.518096853137 0.272083759551 190% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.158740367694 0.0996497079465 159% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.110119428272 0.0662205650399 166% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.307164822774 0.162205337803 189% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.100584491615 0.0443174109184 227% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 13.3589403974 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 53.8541721854 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 11.0289183223 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.92 12.2367328918 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.28 8.42419426049 86% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 63.6247240618 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.7273730684 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.498013245 91% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.2008830022 89% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 68.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.5 Out of 30
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