TPO-03 - Integrated Writing Task Rembrandt is the most famous of the seventeenth-century Dutch painters. However, there are doubts whether some paintings attributed to Rembrandt were actually painted by him. One such painting is known as attributed to Rem

The article and lecture argue on portrait of woman if it belongs to Rembrandt. The article states that painting could not be the work of Rembrandt. In supporting this claim it gives three reasons. However the professor explains that painting indeed is a work of Rembrandt and refutes each of the author's openions.

First, article states that women in the portrait is wearing a cap which is of low price, but the jacket she is wearing has a affluent fur collar that servents cannot afford. Article fiurther states that Rembrandt would not have made such a mistake. But, professor refutes this reason and states that x-ray and pigment analysis shows that fur collar was painted on the top of original painting 100 years after painting was made. He further explains that someone might have done this to make the painting look like formal portrait of an aristocratic woman.

Second, article states that face in the painting looks radiant from light reflected onto it from below fur collar. But fur collar is dark which would probably absorb the light. However professor refutes this fact by saying that fur collar is repainted and original painting had simple light color which would radiate light on face. Thus original painting had realistic connection between color and face.

Finally, the article states that painting was made on several sheets of would glued together which is very unlikely of Rembrandt's work. But, professor refutes this reason by saying that extra pieces of wood has been added after fur collar was added to make it look more attractive. Also, single piece of wood of this work resembles wood from his other painting self portrait with hat.

Thus lecture clearly refutes all the reasons given in article.

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Average: 9.5 (4 votes)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...ting this claim it gives three reasons. However the professor explains that painting in...
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Line 3, column 124, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...rice, but the jacket she is wearing has a affluent fur collar that servents canno...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
... which would probably absorb the light. However professor refutes this fact by saying t...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...olor which would radiate light on face. Thus original painting had realistic connect...
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Line 7, column 79, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'would' requires the base form of the verb: 'glue'
Suggestion: glue
...ing was made on several sheets of would glued together which is very unlikely of Remb...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, look, second, so, thus

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 10.4613686534 124% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 5.04856512141 139% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 7.30242825607 110% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 12.0772626932 132% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 22.412803532 112% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 30.3222958057 119% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 5.01324503311 40% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1450.0 1373.03311258 106% => OK
No of words: 289.0 270.72406181 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.01730103806 5.08290768461 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12310562562 4.04702891845 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.25103991725 2.5805825403 87% => OK
Unique words: 145.0 145.348785872 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.501730103806 0.540411800872 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 423.9 419.366225166 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 3.25607064018 31% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.23620309051 36% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 13.0662251656 122% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 21.2450331126 85% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.8625267666 49.2860985944 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.625 110.228320801 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0625 21.698381199 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.875 7.06452816374 55% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 4.19205298013 119% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 4.33554083885 185% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 4.45695364238 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.27373068433 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.480808778603 0.272083759551 177% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.171292569324 0.0996497079465 172% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0923407453387 0.0662205650399 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.256558982681 0.162205337803 158% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.125796858659 0.0443174109184 284% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 13.3589403974 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 53.8541721854 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.0289183223 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.54 12.2367328918 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.37 8.42419426049 87% => OK
difficult_words: 52.0 63.6247240618 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.7273730684 56% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.498013245 88% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.2008830022 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 81.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.5 Out of 30
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