TPO-11 - Integrated Writing Task
A recent study reveals that people especially young people are reading far less literature,novels, plays, and poems,than they used to. This is troubling because the trend has unfortunate effects for the reading public, for culture in general, and for the future of literature itself. While there has been a decline in book reading generally, the decline has been especially sharp for literature. This is unfortunate because nothing else provides the intellectual stimulation that literature does. Literature encourages us to exercise our imaginations, empathize with others, and expand our understanding of language. So by reading less literature, the reading public is missing out on important benefits.
Unfortunately, missing out on the benefits of literature is not the only problem. What are people reading instead? Consider the prevalence of self-help books on lists of best sellers. These are usually superficial poorly written, and intellectually undemanding. Additionally, instead of sitting down with a challenging novel, many persons are now more likely to turn on the television, watch a music video, or read a Web page. Clearly, diverting time previously spent in reading literature to trivial forms of entertainment has lowered the level of culture in general.
The trend of reading less literature is all the more regrettable because it is taking place during a period when good literature is being written. There are many talented writers today, but theylack an audience. This fact is bound to lead publishers to invest less in literature and so support fewer serious writers. Thus, the writing as well as the reading of literature is likely to decline because of the poor standards of today's readers.
The article and the author presented a study on how reading a literature declined in modern days. Decease in habit of reading literature unfortunate for culture and future literature. And the author also said how peoples missing out the benefits of reading a literature because of this declining trend.
The first point the author represents how trivial forms of entertainment like television or music videos lowered the culture of peoples, and peoples read the intellectually undemanding book instead of good literature books. The professor opposes this point by saying, peoples can read great history or science fiction books and they all have the same literature value. On the other hand, watching great movies or listen to a great piece of music doesn't harm the culture. They have similar cultural values as a literature book.
The second point the author presents, how because of the decline of good readers serious writers lack an audience. Because of publishers invest less on a good literature due to declining of readers, the writers write less. The speaker counters the point by saying, in modern days literature are hard compared to earlier days. Even older readers don't read new kinds of literature, so blaming only readers is not justified.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 447, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...ies or listen to a great piece of music doesnt harm the culture. They have similar cul...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 276, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'days'' or 'day's'?
Suggestion: days'; day's
...counters the point by saying, in modern days literature are hard compared to earlier...
^^^^
Line 5, column 346, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...red to earlier days. Even older readers dont read new kinds of literature, so blamin...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, second, so, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 10.4613686534 19% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 5.04856512141 20% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 7.30242825607 110% => OK
Relative clauses : 0.0 12.0772626932 0% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 4.0 22.412803532 18% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 30.3222958057 82% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.01324503311 80% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1058.0 1373.03311258 77% => OK
No of words: 204.0 270.72406181 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.1862745098 5.08290768461 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.77926670891 4.04702891845 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66251839978 2.5805825403 103% => OK
Unique words: 118.0 145.348785872 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.578431372549 0.540411800872 107% => OK
syllable_count: 330.3 419.366225166 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 3.25607064018 31% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.23620309051 73% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 13.0662251656 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 21.2450331126 85% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.58172043 49.2860985944 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.1818181818 110.228320801 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5454545455 21.698381199 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.18181818182 7.06452816374 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.09492273731 73% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 4.19205298013 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 4.33554083885 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 4.45695364238 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.27373068433 23% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.47140234204 0.272083759551 173% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.192273702287 0.0996497079465 193% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.11019387037 0.0662205650399 166% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.329695405226 0.162205337803 203% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0889240402182 0.0443174109184 201% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 13.3589403974 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 53.8541721854 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.0289183223 93% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.82 12.2367328918 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.32 8.42419426049 99% => OK
difficult_words: 49.0 63.6247240618 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.7273730684 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.498013245 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted. The correct pattern:
para 1: introduction
para 2: doubt 1
para 3: doubt 2
para 4: doubt 3
Less contents wanted from the reading passages(25%), more content wanted from the lecture (75%).
Don't need a conclusion paragraph.
Read sample essays from ETS:
http://www.testbig.com/users/toeflwritingmaster
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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