The editor of a local newspaper sent the following memo to the managing editor of the paper:
“Three years ago when we surveyed our subscribers, they complained about the quality of the reporting and writing in the paper. Since that time, we have made a concerted effort to hire older, more experienced journalists. According to our most recent survey, these changes have made a vast improvement. Not only has our subscriber base grown by 13%, but they also rated us higher on both reporting and writing. Therefore, it is evident that to continue to increase our readership, we should hire the most experienced journalists we can find, and gradually fire our younger, less experienced reporters."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The editor of the local newspaper proposed to hire more old and experienced journalists for more increase in their subscribers and gradually decrease the younger employees. The premises of the author has myriad of loopholes and I am going to present them.
First of all, the author told that three years ago their current subscribers report about the quality and now they gained thirteen percent more subscriber. But the first void is done they actually increase subscribers, where are the proofs that subscribers were increased in three years, what were the number of subscribers three years ago. The author also claims that the readers rated them higher, but the question is the number of readers rated them higher, are the numbers increased or the same as before. the author does not give any proper evidence to bolster his or her claims.
The second point the author told that they need more experienced and old journalists and pare new ones. The question is that, are they sure the old journalists are qualified writer. Maybe the new employees are better qualified than old employees. Maybe new journalists only lack experience and they only need a little bit of training to suave on the areas.
The third paradoxical point author present is, hire more old employees and fire younger ones. This a paradox because if new workers do not get works how could they experienced and there are always limited resources of experienced workers.
In the end, the author gave us some pragmatic claims and evidence full of voids. The author should have provided more figures and data to reinforces his or her evidences.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ??? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 13 15
No. of Words: 271 350
No. of Characters: 1315 1500
No. of Different Words: 138 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.057 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.852 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.48 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 89 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 61 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 44 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 31 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.846 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.716 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.462 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.363 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.592 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.15 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 511, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: The
...umbers increased or the same as before. the author does not give any proper evidenc...
^^^
Line 5, column 312, Rule ID: LITTLE_BIT[1]
Message: Reduce redundancy by using 'little' or 'bit'.
Suggestion: little; bit
...ly lack experience and they only need a little bit of training to suave on the areas. T...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 240, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...mited resources of experienced workers. In the end, the author gave us some prag...
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, if, may, second, so, third, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.6327345309 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.9520958084 31% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 11.1786427146 143% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 13.6137724551 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 28.8173652695 80% => OK
Preposition: 20.0 55.5748502994 36% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 5.0 16.3942115768 30% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1351.0 2260.96107784 60% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 271.0 441.139720559 61% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.9852398524 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.05734859645 4.56307096286 89% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52427654174 2.78398813304 91% => OK
Unique words: 143.0 204.123752495 70% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.527675276753 0.468620217663 113% => OK
syllable_count: 406.8 705.55239521 58% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 19.7664670659 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.197471745 57.8364921388 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.5 119.503703932 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3571428571 23.324526521 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.85714285714 5.70786347227 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0861736212424 0.218282227539 39% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0285173628618 0.0743258471296 38% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0370798184303 0.0701772020484 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0433388067779 0.128457276422 34% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0283933571087 0.0628817314937 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 14.3799401198 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.3550499002 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.197005988 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 12.5979740519 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.43 8.32208582834 89% => OK
difficult_words: 49.0 98.500998004 50% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 12.3882235529 73% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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