The author of the reading argues that the selling and buying of fossils like dinosaurs skeleton conveys negative effects. However, the lecturer casts doubt on this claim by describing the benefits of fossils commercial for both scientists and the general public.
Firstly, the reading notes that the fossils commercial excludes the public from viewing fossils' collections. By illustrating, it states that as many rich people purchase these fossils it hinders fossils' exposure to the public and the scientists, who do not have comparable money as them. However, the lecturer refutes this idea, describing how the purchase of fossils brings about a great fossils exposure to the public. He clarifies that as this trade takes place, low level institutions like schools or other people will be able to own these fossils on their campuses or in their homes.
In addition, on one hand the reading mentions that scientists lose access to the fossils, which are needed for vitial experiments and discoveries. Apart from that, it also shows that robs away some evidence which would be used to study the bioloy of some creatures. On the other hand, the lecturer rebuts this author's point of view. He explains that before the fossils are purchased, scientists are the ones who define their value through intensive experiments. This means that scientists are the first one to be exposed to the fossils through performing detailed dating. Therefore, scientists will never miss anything as long as they are exposed to the fossils beforehand.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 78, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'dinosaurs'' or 'dinosaur's'?
Suggestion: dinosaurs'; dinosaur's
... the selling and buying of fossils like dinosaurs skeleton conveys negative effects. Howe...
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Line 1, column 248, Rule ID: GENERAL_XX[1]
Message: Use simply 'public'.
Suggestion: public
... commercial for both scientists and the general public. Firstly, the reading notes that th...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 390, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'fossils'' or 'fossil's'?
Suggestion: fossils'; fossil's
...urchase of fossils brings about a great fossils exposure to the public. He clarifies th...
^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...s on their campuses or in their homes. In addition, on one hand the reading men...
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, so, therefore, apart from, in addition, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 10.4613686534 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 5.04856512141 59% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 7.30242825607 82% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 12.0772626932 108% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 22.412803532 116% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 30.3222958057 99% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 5.01324503311 40% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1290.0 1373.03311258 94% => OK
No of words: 247.0 270.72406181 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.22267206478 5.08290768461 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.96437052324 4.04702891845 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60501069905 2.5805825403 101% => OK
Unique words: 138.0 145.348785872 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.558704453441 0.540411800872 103% => OK
syllable_count: 385.2 419.366225166 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 3.25607064018 154% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.23620309051 61% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 2.5761589404 194% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 13.0662251656 92% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 21.2450331126 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 28.7918777127 49.2860985944 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 107.5 110.228320801 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5833333333 21.698381199 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.08333333333 7.06452816374 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.09492273731 73% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 4.19205298013 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 4.33554083885 185% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 4.45695364238 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.27373068433 23% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.453467995571 0.272083759551 167% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.174069573161 0.0996497079465 175% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0892015891172 0.0662205650399 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.31395116179 0.162205337803 194% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0582111456127 0.0443174109184 131% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 13.3589403974 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 53.8541721854 95% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.0289183223 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 12.2367328918 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.46 8.42419426049 100% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 63.6247240618 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.7273730684 98% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.498013245 95% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.2008830022 116% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted. The correct pattern:
para 1: introduction
para 2: doubt 1
para 3: doubt 2
para 4: doubt 3
Less contents wanted from the reading passages(25%), more content wanted from the lecture (75%).
Don't need a conclusion paragraph.
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Rates: 81.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.5 Out of 30
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