TPO 28-Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Parents today are more involved in their children's education than parents were in the past.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays life has been changed in compare with the past. These changes are not limited to useful inventions that make life easier. The human lifestyle has been changed also. Some people holds the view that parent’s engagement to their children education process has been increased during this changes. However, others believe that parents are less involve about their children academic life than pass. I completely agree with latter group opinion that children autonomy on their educational life has been enhanced which lead their parents to be less effective in their education process.
Technology has facilitated educational process for children. In fact, children look for their questions and problems' answer on the Internet which decreases their need to their parents. In the past, if a child had a question in her assignment, she would have asked her parents about it. Parent was one of the most reliable sources of science for their children. However, nowadays children have access to online classes, online tutoring, Ebooks and many strong searching engines. These facilities have reduced parents’ involvement in their children education. For example, I asked my father to check all of my physic and math problems when I was a teenager. In addition, if I had a difficulty in learning some topic, my father has the role of my tutor. However, my cousin, who is 10 years old, does not ask any question from my aunt. If she has some question, she will look for the answer on the Internet.
Parents have become aware of disadvantages of their involvement in their children education. Indeed, the parents reduce their children independence by involving in their education which has an undeniable effect on their future success. In May 2014, an unprecedented research on the relation of success and independency was supervised by Professor Maryam Assadi on University of Tehran. Her research team surveyed over 10000 successful people about the essential factors of their success. According to the survey data, almost 93 present of them asserted that their independence has led them to success. Moreover, 80 percent of them respondents mainly responded that they have done their assignments on their own and they never asked for parents help in their education. The survey author generalized their finding and said that " our survey indicates that autonomy is academic life from first stages of life is a significant reason for success in further stages of life.
To put it into a nutshell, I strongly believe that children have become more autonomous in their education. In other words, parents are less engage in their children academic life. The technology has reduced the children’s' need to parents. In addition, the disadvantages of parents’ involvement have been revealed which has helped parents to become inform about their consequences of this behavior. In my opinion, parents should learn the difference between consulting and managing their children’s life. They should let their children decide about their education on their own. If they want to help their children in their important decisions, they can represent their concern in the form of advice.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 169, Rule ID: ALSO_SENT_END[1]
Message: 'Also' is not used at the end of the sentence. Use 'as well' instead.
Suggestion: as well
...r. The human lifestyle has been changed also. Some people holds the view that parent...
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Line 1, column 294, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...ation process has been increased during this changes. However, others believe that p...
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Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'unprecedented research'.
Suggestion: unprecedented research
...t on their future success. In May 2014, an unprecedented research on the relation of success and independ...
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Line 4, column 236, Rule ID: TO_NON_BASE[1]
Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'parent'.
Suggestion: parent
...has reduced the children's need to parents. In addition, the disadvantages of pare...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'first', 'however', 'if', 'look', 'may', 'moreover', 'so', 'for example', 'in addition', 'in fact', 'in my opinion', 'in other words']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.280068728522 0.261695866417 107% => OK
Verbs: 0.158075601375 0.158904122519 99% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0515463917526 0.0723426182421 71% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0292096219931 0.0435111971325 67% => OK
Pronouns: 0.103092783505 0.0277247811725 372% => OK
Prepositions: 0.137457044674 0.128828473217 107% => OK
Participles: 0.0463917525773 0.0370669169778 125% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.79173677463 2.5805825403 108% => OK
Infinitives: 0.020618556701 0.0208969081088 99% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00154638098197 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0618556701031 0.128158765124 48% => Some determiners wanted.
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0085910652921 0.0158828679856 54% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0120274914089 0.0114777025283 105% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3199.0 1645.83664459 194% => OK
No of words: 509.0 271.125827815 188% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.28487229862 6.08160592843 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.74984508646 4.04852973271 117% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.396856581532 0.374372842146 106% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.310412573674 0.287516216867 108% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.235756385069 0.187439937562 126% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.139489194499 0.113142543107 123% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79173677463 2.5805825403 108% => OK
Unique words: 242.0 145.348785872 166% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.475442043222 0.539623497131 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 55.3009722877 53.8517498576 103% => OK
How many sentences: 30.0 13.0529801325 230% => Less sentences wanted.
Sentence length: 16.9666666667 21.7502111507 78% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.8833154736 49.3711431718 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.633333333 132.220823453 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.9666666667 21.7502111507 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.433333333333 0.878197800319 49% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 3.39072847682 118% => OK
Readability: 48.0079240341 50.5018328374 95% => OK
Elegance: 1.59763313609 1.90840788429 84% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.314144358791 0.549887131256 57% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.115610333062 0.142949733639 81% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0808036983907 0.0787303798458 103% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.454468100737 0.631733273073 72% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.110781541958 0.139662658121 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.128421385845 0.266732575781 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0660620277107 0.103435571967 64% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.417152810716 0.414875509568 101% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.121174655235 0.0530846634433 228% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.248556348683 0.40443939384 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0272766210616 0.0528353158467 52% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 4.33554083885 300% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.26048565121 282% => Less neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 5.0 3.49668874172 143% => OK
Negative topic words: 0.0 3.62251655629 0% => More negative topic words wanted.
Neutral topic words: 2.0 3.1766004415 63% => OK
Total topic words: 7.0 10.2958057395 68% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Less content wanted. Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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