TPO-40 - Integrated Writing Task Many scientists believe it would be possible to maintain a permanent human presence on Mars or the Moon. On the other hand, conditions on Venus are so extreme and inhospitable that maintaining a human presence there would

The reading and lecture are both about the possibility to maintain human presence on Venus planet. The author of the reading believes that, it is impossible to maintain human presence on the Venus, however, the lecturer casts doubt on the claim which is made by the author and She think that with few strategy, it is possible to survive on Venus.
First of all, the author points out that atmospheric pressure at Venus is higher in compare to the earth’s pressure, which can crush human body within hour of landing on the planet. Even spacecrafts are not resistant to the pressure. However, this point is challenged by the lecturer, she says that the atmospheric pressure at 50 km above of the Venus surface is equal to the earth’s atmospheric pressure. She also suggests that the space station at 50 km above on the surface can serve a permanent station of the human.

Secondly, the author contends that the Venus atmosphere cantinas carbon dioxide, nitrogen and sulphuric acid, however oxygen and water vapor are merely present, which is essential for the survival. However, the lecturer rebut the claim made by the author, she suggests that the with the help of chemical reaction this atmospheric carbon dioxide and sulfuric acid can be converted into oxygen and water. She also mentions that the gases are readily available in Venus atmosphere.
Finally, the author claims that the only 40% sunlight reaches to the surface of the Venus, however large amount of the 40% light is blocked by the dense layer of carbon dioxide. Further reading also point out that it affect the solar energy as well as electrical energy. The lecturer says that, 50 Km above the Venus surface, there is less reflection of sunlight, at this level human can utilize maximum level of sunlight. She further stated that it can maximize the solar energy power as well as electrical energy.

In the last, the author made some point to explain that the permanent human presence is not possible at the surface of the Venus planet , however, the lecturer rebut s the author’s arguments and suggests that, it is possible to maintain the permanent presence of the human.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 282, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'She' must be used with a third-person verb: 'thinks'.
Suggestion: thinks
...aim which is made by the author and She think that with few strategy, it is possible ...
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Line 1, column 298, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun strategy seems to be countable; consider using: 'few strategies'.
Suggestion: few strategies
...e by the author and She think that with few strategy, it is possible to survive on Venus. F...
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Line 2, column 128, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...pare to the earth's pressure, which can crush human body within hour of land...
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Line 7, column 136, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...sible at the surface of the Venus planet , however, the lecturer rebut s the autho...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, second, secondly, so, well, as well as, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 10.4613686534 153% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 5.04856512141 99% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 7.30242825607 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 12.0772626932 141% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 22.412803532 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 30.3222958057 165% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 5.01324503311 160% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1801.0 1373.03311258 131% => OK
No of words: 364.0 270.72406181 134% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9478021978 5.08290768461 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36792674256 4.04702891845 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52659489064 2.5805825403 98% => OK
Unique words: 157.0 145.348785872 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.431318681319 0.540411800872 80% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 565.2 419.366225166 135% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 3.25607064018 276% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 10.0 8.23620309051 121% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 13.0662251656 107% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 21.2450331126 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 65.3603824334 49.2860985944 133% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.642857143 110.228320801 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.0 21.698381199 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.28571428571 7.06452816374 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 4.19205298013 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 4.33554083885 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 4.45695364238 135% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.27373068433 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.349485448021 0.272083759551 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.132063655501 0.0996497079465 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0630006760126 0.0662205650399 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.204546276348 0.162205337803 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0164675924161 0.0443174109184 37% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 13.3589403974 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 53.8541721854 84% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.0289183223 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.73 12.2367328918 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.44 8.42419426049 100% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 63.6247240618 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.7273730684 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.498013245 118% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.2008830022 125% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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