TPO-42 - Integrated Writing Task Glass is a favored building material for modern architecture, yet it is also very dangerous for wild birds. Because they often cannot distinguish between glass and open air, millions of birds are harmed every year when the

Both the reading and the passage discusses the hitting on the birds to windows. The passage proposes some solutions to prevent birds to hit the glasses of the windows. However, the professor in the lecture believes that none of them are practical and give his reasons.

At first, the passage states that by using one-way glasses we can prevent colliding the birds, however, the professor in the lecture challenges this solution. He believes that the one-way glasses are reflecting like mirrors and birds are not able to perceive the mirror and think there is nothing, hence, fly toward it.

Second, the author of the passage asserts that paint colorful lines on the glasses can prevent the birds from colliding with them. On the other hand, the professor in the lecture acclaims that the birds will fly toward these glasses because they think these are holes that they can fly through them.

Third, the passage states that by creating a magnetic field, the birds will not hit the glasses. However, the professor believes that the birds use the magnetic field for long movements, not for short distances. He also mentions that the birds use their eye for moving through the short distance.

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Average: 6.1 (1 vote)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, hence, however, second, so, third, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 10.4613686534 48% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 5.04856512141 99% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 7.30242825607 55% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 12.0772626932 75% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 22.412803532 103% => OK
Preposition: 23.0 30.3222958057 76% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 5.01324503311 40% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 997.0 1373.03311258 73% => OK
No of words: 201.0 270.72406181 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.96019900498 5.08290768461 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.76529505866 4.04702891845 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.24606892662 2.5805825403 87% => OK
Unique words: 97.0 145.348785872 67% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.482587064677 0.540411800872 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 290.7 419.366225166 69% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.55342163355 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.23620309051 109% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 13.0662251656 77% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 21.2450331126 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.3549068922 49.2860985944 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.7 110.228320801 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1 21.698381199 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.5 7.06452816374 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 4.19205298013 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 4.45695364238 22% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.27373068433 94% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.387197859677 0.272083759551 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.161639463152 0.0996497079465 162% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.073435771898 0.0662205650399 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.23762736136 0.162205337803 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0686969734762 0.0443174109184 155% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 13.3589403974 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 53.8541721854 126% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.0289183223 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 12.2367328918 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.54 8.42419426049 90% => OK
difficult_words: 37.0 63.6247240618 58% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.7273730684 84% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.498013245 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.5 Out of 30
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