tpo 45-integ

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tpo 45-integ

Both the reading and listening parts offer two opposite views about the possibility of bees' existence in 200 million years ago. While the passage lists three reasons to make their existence skeptical; the professor, on the other hand, mentioned some pieces of evidence to cast doubt on the accuracy of reasons discussed in the passage.
First of all, the text refers that there is no fossil of actual bees which belongs to this prolonged time; therefore, the bee did not habitat on that time. On the contrary, the instructor casts doubt on the accuracy of this reason. As she explains, there is a possibility that there was no suitable condition for the preservation of bees' fossil on that time, since, bee requires a specific liquid released by trees for its fossilization process. In a case, that trees of that period had not produced this demanded substance, the dead bees were not preserved appropriately and did not fossilized. Therefore, the existence of no fossil of actual bees did not mean that bees did not live 200 million years ago.
Secondly, meanwhile, the article considering the date of flower appearance on earth as the clue that is later than the 200 million years ago and bee relies on them for its survival to reject the bees' existence; the lecturer, on the other hand, refutes this clue too. As she describes, although in current time the there is a mutual relationship between bees and flowers; in the past, there was the possibility that bees depend on the different sources such as the pine trees or fern as the food. Thus, the absence of flower on that time did not verify that the bees were absent too.
Finally, the professor discusses the passage points about the missing details in the structure of bees’ nest found in Arizona and belonged to 200 million years ago. The professor assents that the founded nest fossil lacks in the spiral pattern; in contrast, it possesses the same chemical substance which finds in modern bees' nest. According to her assertation, this fossil has the identical waterproofing substance used by the modern bees for insulation of their nest. Thus, this nest belongs to bees in 200 million years ago.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Both the reading and listening parts off...
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Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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... of reasons discussed in the passage. First of all, the text refers that there...
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Line 2, column 590, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'did' requires the base form of the verb: 'fossilize'
Suggestion: fossilize
...not preserved appropriately and did not fossilized. Therefore, the existence of no fossil ...
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Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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...es did not live 200 million years ago. Secondly, meanwhile, the article conside...
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Line 3, column 201, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'bees'' or 'bee's'?
Suggestion: bees'; bee's
... on them for its survival to reject the bees existence; the lecturer, on the other h...
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Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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...verify that the bees were absent too. Finally, the professor discusses the pas...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, while, in contrast, such as, first of all, on the contrary, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 10.4613686534 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 5.04856512141 0% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 7.30242825607 82% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 12.0772626932 116% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 22.412803532 120% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 30.3222958057 168% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 5.01324503311 299% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1801.0 1373.03311258 131% => OK
No of words: 369.0 270.72406181 136% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.88075880759 5.08290768461 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38284983912 4.04702891845 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58623496155 2.5805825403 100% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 145.348785872 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.474254742547 0.540411800872 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 547.2 419.366225166 130% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 3.25607064018 123% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.23620309051 134% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 1.25165562914 320% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 2.5761589404 272% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 13.0662251656 107% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 21.2450331126 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 58.4556346684 49.2860985944 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.642857143 110.228320801 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.3571428571 21.698381199 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.71428571429 7.06452816374 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 4.19205298013 143% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 4.33554083885 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 4.45695364238 157% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.27373068433 140% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.072954721263 0.272083759551 27% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0339268359021 0.0996497079465 34% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0206584364796 0.0662205650399 31% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0471375209367 0.162205337803 29% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0221493979869 0.0443174109184 50% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 13.3589403974 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 53.8541721854 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.0289183223 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.32 12.2367328918 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.69 8.42419426049 103% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 63.6247240618 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.7273730684 98% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.498013245 118% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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