TPO-45 - Integrated Writing Task Any student of paleontology will be struck by the fact that a great many animals of the past were considerably larger than they are today. This holds true for species ranging from dinosaurs to most mammals. Just why they w

In this set of material, the passage and the lecture offer two opposing points of view about the first existing of bees on earth. While the passage states that the discovery of very old fossil structures was found in Arizona that dated to 200 million years ago cannot be made by bees and provides three reasons of support, the lecture denies all the reasons and calls them unconvincing reasons.
First, the passage asserts that due to the fact that no fossil remains of actual bees have ever been found that date to 200 million years ago, the structures could not build by bees. On the other hand, the lecture refutes this remark; She states that the reason that there are no actual fossil remains of bees is that these creatures are hard to preserve in order to become fossils. In addition, she argues that if there were certain kind of trees which produce rezone in that period, we now may have fossils of bees that date to 200 million years ago.
Second, the article declares that the absence of flowering plants in that period indicates that bees could not exist because those plants are the food source for bees. In contrast, the speaker refutes this remark by illustrating the fact that bees could rely on other kinds of plants in order to obtain their foods.
Finally, the author claims that although the fossilized structure found in Arizona might be similar to modern bees' nest they lack some of the finer details of modern bees' nest. For example, caps. In contradict, the speaker throws down this opinion by shedding light on the truth behind these structures. She states that although these structures lack some of the modern nest features but chemical evidence strongly determine that these structures are similar to the modern counterparts in chemical compounds; for example, they have a material that uses by modern bees in order to prevent water from licking inside the nests.

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Average: 8 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 131, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...e similar to modern bees nest they lack some of the finer details of modern bees nest. For ...
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Line 4, column 351, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...tes that although these structures lack some of the modern nest features but chemical evide...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, if, may, second, so, while, for example, in addition, in contrast, kind of, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 10.4613686534 96% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 5.04856512141 119% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 7.30242825607 55% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 20.0 12.0772626932 166% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 22.412803532 161% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 30.3222958057 165% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 5.01324503311 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1569.0 1373.03311258 114% => OK
No of words: 326.0 270.72406181 120% => OK
Chars per words: 4.81288343558 5.08290768461 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24917287072 4.04702891845 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.22866852142 2.5805825403 86% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 145.348785872 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.509202453988 0.540411800872 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 470.7 419.366225166 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.55342163355 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 3.25607064018 154% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.23620309051 109% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 2.5761589404 194% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 13.0662251656 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 21.2450331126 137% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 74.8599794879 49.2860985944 152% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.636363636 110.228320801 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.6363636364 21.698381199 137% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.3636363636 7.06452816374 147% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 4.33554083885 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.27373068433 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.100481860815 0.272083759551 37% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0467075975135 0.0996497079465 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0163197881187 0.0662205650399 25% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0644908505095 0.162205337803 40% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00914091482489 0.0443174109184 21% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 13.3589403974 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.96 53.8541721854 109% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.2 11.0289183223 111% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.21 12.2367328918 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.51 8.42419426049 101% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 63.6247240618 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 10.7273730684 168% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.498013245 130% => OK
text_standard: 18.0 11.2008830022 161% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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