TPO 46
The article states that using medical electronic recording has advantages over traditionally recorded data and provides three reasons of support. However, the professor explain that it is not true for all conditions and refutes each of author’s reasons.
First, the reading claims that the use of electronic records can help reduce costs. However, the professor says that the doctors and staffs tend to keep a paper copy for signature, legal issues and storing paper documents. Second, the article posits that electronic records helps to prevent errors. However, the professor say that doctors still use pen and paper to write patient issues by hand and office staffs are obliged to enter the details down on a computer. As a result, the handwriting interpreting still exists. Third, the reading says that, the electronic recording data may help in medical research aid. The professor posits this point by mentioning data access difficulties, which is legislated by U.S authority of privacy to access to data. We also learn that patients have the right to deny the public access to their health data anytime. Which means necessity of giving permissions. Note that these permissions doesn't last long.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 714, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: S
... difficulties, which is legislated by U.S authority of privacy to access to data....
^
Line 2, column 855, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Which” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ic access to their health data anytime. Which means necessity of giving permissions. ...
^^^^^
Line 2, column 928, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...ermissions. Note that these permissions doesnt last long.
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, may, second, so, still, third, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 10.4613686534 29% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 5.04856512141 40% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 7.30242825607 82% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 12.0772626932 91% => OK
Pronoun: 14.0 22.412803532 62% => OK
Preposition: 20.0 30.3222958057 66% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 5.01324503311 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1016.0 1373.03311258 74% => OK
No of words: 192.0 270.72406181 71% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.29166666667 5.08290768461 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.72241943641 4.04702891845 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66723626729 2.5805825403 103% => OK
Unique words: 120.0 145.348785872 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.625 0.540411800872 116% => OK
syllable_count: 306.9 419.366225166 73% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 3.25607064018 31% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.23620309051 121% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 2.5761589404 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 13.0662251656 92% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 21.2450331126 75% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.3283895198 49.2860985944 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.6666666667 110.228320801 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.0 21.698381199 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.66666666667 7.06452816374 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 2.0 4.09492273731 49% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 4.19205298013 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 4.33554083885 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 4.45695364238 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.27373068433 47% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.398798265782 0.272083759551 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.132122798421 0.0996497079465 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.12755970566 0.0662205650399 193% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.310262904091 0.162205337803 191% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0377364102681 0.0443174109184 85% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 13.3589403974 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 53.8541721854 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.0289183223 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.11 12.2367328918 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.71 8.42419426049 103% => OK
difficult_words: 52.0 63.6247240618 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.7273730684 79% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.498013245 80% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted. The correct pattern:
para 1: introduction
para 2: doubt 1
para 3: doubt 2
para 4: doubt 3
Less contents wanted from the reading passages(25%), more content wanted from the lecture (75%).
Don't need a conclusion paragraph.
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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