TPO-46 - Integrated Writing Task In the United States, medical information about patients traditionally has been recorded and stored on paper forms. However, there are efforts to persuade doctors to adopt electronic medical record systems in which form

Essay topics: TPO-46 - Integrated Writing Task In the United States, medical information about patients traditionally has been recorded and stored on paper forms. However, there are efforts to persuade doctors to adopt electronic medical record systems in which form

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The main idea of both the passage and the talk is about using electronic forms to record medical information rather than traditionally recorded paper forms. In the text, the author explains three main advantages of the electronic forms to the paper version. The lecturer challenges all the viable benefits mentioned in the reading, and believes that none of these benefits achievable.

Firstly, the author states that using the electronic forms rather than paper forms will reduce the costs for saving and storage of the paper records. Conversely, the lecturer brings up the idea that electronic forms cannot reduce costs for storage of papers since the doctors have been using the paper version forms as a backup in the emergencies. Besides, the paper versions have a signature of patients. Therefore, doctors will not dis continue using paper forms.

Furthermore, the author asserts that implementing electronic forms will lead to less medical errors and will make it more understandable for everyone. On the other hand, the lecturer posits that doctors utilize pen when they examine the patients, so they are possible to make errors. Additionally, doctors' hand writing is understandable for people who will enter this information to the computer.

Eventually, the reading passage holds the opinion that electronic forms will provide large amount of data that other doctors can use this information. The lecturer, however, rebuts this idea by pointing out that there are very strict policy for using other patients medical records. Also, patients are able to block their records for using to other purposes. Therefore, if others want to use database they need for patients permissions.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, conversely, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, so, therefore, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 10.4613686534 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 5.04856512141 178% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 7.30242825607 55% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 12.0772626932 83% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 22.412803532 76% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 30.3222958057 79% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 5.01324503311 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1430.0 1373.03311258 104% => OK
No of words: 267.0 270.72406181 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.35580524345 5.08290768461 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.04229324003 4.04702891845 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67545263899 2.5805825403 104% => OK
Unique words: 140.0 145.348785872 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.524344569288 0.540411800872 97% => OK
syllable_count: 443.7 419.366225166 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.55342163355 109% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 3.25607064018 0% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.23620309051 121% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 13.0662251656 107% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 21.2450331126 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.8113536262 49.2860985944 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.142857143 110.228320801 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0714285714 21.698381199 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.57142857143 7.06452816374 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 4.19205298013 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 4.45695364238 45% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.27373068433 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.377009893922 0.272083759551 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.132200321143 0.0996497079465 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.097446089313 0.0662205650399 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.221653250396 0.162205337803 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0646753659248 0.0443174109184 146% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 13.3589403974 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 53.8541721854 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.0289183223 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.81 12.2367328918 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.48 8.42419426049 101% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 63.6247240618 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.7273730684 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.498013245 91% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.2008830022 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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