tpo 46 using the benefits of using the electronic medical records
Since the beginning of the current century, the ability to make a decision has become a common trend. Some people believe that young adult today depend on their parents to make decisions; however, there is a substantial body of evidence claims that they are independent and could could control their owen lives. From a personal perspective, youngsters nowadays are capable of making decisions about their own lives more properly than they were in the past given that they are more educated and more adapted to technology. Below I will strive to explain my supporting points in more details.
The first and foremost point, in the last three decades, educating children has improved drastically. To put it in other words, schools
have designed their curriculum with taking a child's personallity into consideration. Provided that students are taught how to think, they could make their decisions. A vivid example that could be given to shed light on that is, schools in developed countries, such as Canada and the United States of America, have started to teach their students ideas and concepts rather than fact. Thus, instead of teaching them specific curriculum, they teach them how to integrate information and explore topics. Furthermore, students are actively particpate in the class not just passively. In addition to that, this approach could promote not only students immagination, but also creativety. Hence, they could think rationally and set up to achieve their goals. Consequently , they have the ability to make optimal decisions by themselves without dependancy on their parents.
Next, coupled with fanctional education, adaptation to technology is another reason why young people could make decisions alone. Although advanced technology are intricate, youngsters have the ability to adapt to it quickly. Moreover, using cutting-edge technology open the door to a wealth of information, which helps young adults tomake realistic decisions. For instance, seven years ago, I finished high school and I try to opt for a university. Since I had the ability to use the internet, I searched for any information I want to know. Likewise, adapting to technology helped me to know how couId admit to a university and check the strenghtens and weakness aspects of each one. As a result, technology played a vital role on helping me making my own desicion.
Taking everthing into consideration; without a doubt, young people today could make their own decisions. It is suggested that schools design learning activities to help their students to be more independent.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: could
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Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to make' or 'make'.
Suggestion: to make; make
...ology played a vital role on helping me making my own desicion. Taking everthing int...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, likewise, moreover, so, thus, for instance, in addition, such as, as a result, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 10.4613686534 124% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 5.04856512141 178% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 7.30242825607 151% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 12.0772626932 75% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 42.0 22.412803532 187% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 30.3222958057 181% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 5.01324503311 219% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2168.0 1373.03311258 158% => OK
No of words: 409.0 270.72406181 151% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.30073349633 5.08290768461 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49708221141 4.04702891845 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86040894311 2.5805825403 111% => OK
Unique words: 238.0 145.348785872 164% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.581907090465 0.540411800872 108% => OK
syllable_count: 677.7 419.366225166 162% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.55342163355 109% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 3.25607064018 246% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 8.23620309051 36% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 1.25165562914 399% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 2.5761589404 349% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 13.0662251656 168% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 21.2450331126 85% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.5005833698 49.2860985944 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.5454545455 110.228320801 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5909090909 21.698381199 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.18181818182 7.06452816374 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 4.19205298013 143% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 4.33554083885 346% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 4.45695364238 45% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.27373068433 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0562134041578 0.272083759551 21% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0173573260259 0.0996497079465 17% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0112787656331 0.0662205650399 17% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0284218696191 0.162205337803 18% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0147360199029 0.0443174109184 33% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 13.3589403974 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 53.8541721854 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.0289183223 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.46 12.2367328918 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.01 8.42419426049 107% => OK
difficult_words: 116.0 63.6247240618 182% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.7273730684 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.498013245 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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