The author of the reading believes that human trip to Mars is impossible because of several problems. The lecturer casts doubt on the claims made in the lecture and provides solutions that scientists have proposed.
First of all, the author points out that astronauts cannot have an adequate supply of food, water, and oxygen because spaceships have limited capacity. This point is challenged by the lecturer. He says that astronauts could use the hydroponics method to grow crops in water instead of soil. This will provide people with not only additional food but also with fresh air as the plants will release oxygen.
Secondly, the author contends that the trip to Mars and back will take at least two years, and spending that much time on the zero-gravity environment will cause serious health problems such as losing mass and bone density. The professor rebuts this argument by saying that if the astronauts will exercising enough and take vitamins they will not face these problems.
Finally, the author says that it is not possible to protect the ship from sun radiation as constructing a shield will add a lot of weight to it. The lecturer, on the other hand, posits that astronauts will not be always exposed to radiations and if they do they can use a shelter that will not add extra weight to the spaceship.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 298, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'exercise'
...t by saying that if the astronauts will exercising enough and take vitamins they will not ...
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, if, second, secondly, so, at least, such as, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 10.4613686534 38% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 5.04856512141 238% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 8.0 7.30242825607 110% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 12.0772626932 83% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 22.412803532 89% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 30.3222958057 82% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 5.01324503311 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1103.0 1373.03311258 80% => OK
No of words: 226.0 270.72406181 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.88053097345 5.08290768461 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.87727950738 4.04702891845 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48024933758 2.5805825403 96% => OK
Unique words: 137.0 145.348785872 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.606194690265 0.540411800872 112% => OK
syllable_count: 326.7 419.366225166 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.55342163355 90% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.23620309051 85% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 13.0662251656 77% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 21.2450331126 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.7389777855 49.2860985944 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.3 110.228320801 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6 21.698381199 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.3 7.06452816374 146% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 4.33554083885 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 4.45695364238 157% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.27373068433 23% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0926462460888 0.272083759551 34% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0374343038625 0.0996497079465 38% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0267744274787 0.0662205650399 40% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0545533623353 0.162205337803 34% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0179315357918 0.0443174109184 40% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
automated_readability_index: 12.9 13.3589403974 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 53.8541721854 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.0289183223 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.32 12.2367328918 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.08 8.42419426049 96% => OK
difficult_words: 48.0 63.6247240618 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.7273730684 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.498013245 103% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.2008830022 71% => OK
What are above readability scores?
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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