TPO 49 Writing Integrated
Like many creatures, humpback whales migrate long distances for feeding and mating purposes. How animals manage to migrate long distances is often puzzling. In the case of humpback whales, we may have found the answer: they may be navigating by the stars, much as early human sailors did. What we know about humpback whales makes this a distinct possibility.
The reading provides some evidence supporting the fact that humpback whales use stars as aids for navigation. Although the lecturer finds the idea attractive, he casts doubt on the reasons provided by the reading passage.
First, the author claims that according to high intelligence of humpback whales, they probably have established cognitive ability to use stars to navigate by. Conversely, the lecturer brings up the idea that there's no definite relation between intelligence and using stars as navigation tools. To illustrate, some birds such as ducks have the ability to navigate by stars. However, these creatures have average cognitive abilities and this certain ability is merely related to their instinct rather than their intelligence. Thus, the fact that humpback whales are intelligent animals doesn't mean that they are able to navigate by stars.
Furthermore, the reading holds the view that humpback whales might use stars as external features to guide themselves on their straight line movement. On the contrary, the professor underlines the fact that humpback whales seem to use their senses to orient themselves. As these species have a certain substance in their brain which is sensitive to magnetic field, they may use Earth's magnetic field to find direction and orient themselves.
Finally, the reading passage asserts that a possible illustration for sky seeing behavior of humpback whales called spy-hopping is that they get information for navigation through watching stars. In contrast, the speaker dismisses the issue due to the fact that other sharks exhibit such behavior as well, but they don't migrate at all. Therefore, humpback whales don't behave this way to get information for navigation. Moreover, humpback whales also do spy-hopping during the day when there is no visible star in the sky. Therefore, this reason is not valid and well-supported.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: there's
...y, the lecturer brings up the idea that theres no definite relation between intelligen...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...humpback whales are intelligent animals doesnt mean that they are able to navigate by ...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...exhibit such behavior as well, but they dont migrate at all. Therefore, humpback wha...
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Suggestion: don't
...rate at all. Therefore, humpback whales dont behave this way to get information for ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, conversely, finally, first, furthermore, however, may, moreover, so, therefore, thus, well, in contrast, such as, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 10.4613686534 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 5.04856512141 40% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 7.30242825607 68% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 12.0772626932 99% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 22.412803532 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 31.0 30.3222958057 102% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 5.01324503311 299% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1598.0 1373.03311258 116% => OK
No of words: 294.0 270.72406181 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.43537414966 5.08290768461 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14082457966 4.04702891845 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76506136427 2.5805825403 107% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 145.348785872 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.551020408163 0.540411800872 102% => OK
syllable_count: 486.0 419.366225166 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.55342163355 109% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 3.25607064018 154% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.23620309051 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 13.0662251656 115% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 21.2450331126 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.2292699347 49.2860985944 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.533333333 110.228320801 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6 21.698381199 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.33333333333 7.06452816374 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 4.19205298013 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 4.33554083885 231% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 4.45695364238 22% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.27373068433 94% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.457758334674 0.272083759551 168% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.150863176701 0.0996497079465 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0794111649223 0.0662205650399 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.25729312619 0.162205337803 159% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0591704742507 0.0443174109184 134% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 13.3589403974 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 53.8541721854 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.0289183223 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.27 12.2367328918 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.34 8.42419426049 99% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 63.6247240618 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.7273730684 84% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.498013245 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 81.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.5 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.