TPO-51 - Integrated Writing Task
The reading passage mainly talks about several surprising elephants' behaviors and supports them with specific reasons. However, the listening lecture disagrees with them and claims they are misunderstood by giving specific reasons.
In contrast to know when they are about to die, old elephants leave their herds just because their teeth are not sharp anymore. Thus, they have problem with chewing and have to seek softer vegetation as food resource. Besides, softer vegetation is always near water which cause that old elephants always get close to water and finally die there. that is why their bodies are always be found neat water.
According to to the lecture, elephants' painting skill is trained by human 15trainers but not born with. The trainers will stroke elephants' ears when they are painting. As elephants' ears are very sensitive, the trainers are able to use certain way to control the directions of elephants moving paintbrushes. Therefore, elephants are just painting lines that trainers force them to paint instead of pictures. In conclusion, after practice, the elephants just remember the paintbrushes moving route instead of learning how to paint.
The professor in the lecture also explain that elephants try to get away with mice or small mammals not because they are afraid with 26 them but are afraid of unfamiliar animals just as most of animals' natural instincts. An experiment is mentioned in the lecture, people made several mice get along with elephants for a while. At the beginning, the elephants did try to get away with these little mice, but once they got used to little mice and found out they were not threatened, they did not mind mice anymore.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 347, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: That
...t close to water and finally die there. that is why their bodies are always be found...
^^^^
Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...odies are always be found neat water. According to to the lecture, elephants p...
^^^^
Line 11, column 11, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: to
...ys be found neat water. According to to the lecture, elephants painting skill i...
^^^^^
Line 17, column 187, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the animals') or simply say ''most animals''.
Suggestion: most of the animals; most animals
...re afraid of unfamiliar animals just as most of animals natural instincts. An experiment is men...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, finally, however, if, so, therefore, thus, while, in conclusion, in contrast, in contrast to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 10.4613686534 153% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 5.04856512141 20% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 7.30242825607 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 12.0772626932 58% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 22.412803532 89% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 30.3222958057 125% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 5.01324503311 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1426.0 1373.03311258 104% => OK
No of words: 276.0 270.72406181 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.16666666667 5.08290768461 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07593519647 4.04702891845 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52684598672 2.5805825403 98% => OK
Unique words: 150.0 145.348785872 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.54347826087 0.540411800872 101% => OK
syllable_count: 428.4 419.366225166 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.23620309051 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 2.5761589404 194% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 13.0662251656 107% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 21.2450331126 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.3708958135 49.2860985944 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.857142857 110.228320801 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7142857143 21.698381199 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 7.06452816374 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 4.19205298013 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.27373068433 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.272083759551 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.0996497079465 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0662205650399 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.162205337803 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0443174109184 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 13.3589403974 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 53.8541721854 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.0289183223 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 12.2367328918 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.5 8.42419426049 89% => OK
difficult_words: 51.0 63.6247240618 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.7273730684 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.498013245 91% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.2008830022 116% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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