tpo 51,1
In the readıng,the article introduces three surprising beliefs about elephant behaviors. However in the listening, the professor gives out three reasons why these beliefs cannot stand.
First,the reading passage claims that elephants are aware of approaching death .Nevertheless,the listenıng poınts out that he true reason why an elephant may break away from the herd is that their teeth become older and the anımal has to seek for softer plants as theır food resources. Therefore, they would get close to the water where soft plants usually occur and fınally die there. Second, the reading asserts that elephants have artistic ability to know how to paint for representing objects through art.However , the lıstenıng rejects thıs statement. Accordıng to the lecture, in order to train elephants to paint, the painters will stroke the elephants ears and help them memorıze certain patterns of paintbrush strokes. In thıs way, elephant would remember certaın patterns for representıng the exact ımages .Third, the reading says that the elephants have a fear of mice. But the listenıng also disputes thıs because ıt supposes the reason why elephants try to avoıd mıce ıs that mıce are unfamılıar to them not that they are afraıd of them . Those elephants living in the zoo dont show any fright of mice ,because mıce are always around them and they get used to these small creatures very much .In another word, once elephants are accustomed to mice, they would not mind ıf they are around or not.In a nutshell, by giving all these three reasons, the listening successfully goes against the readıng article.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...elephants are aware of approaching death .Nevertheless,the listenıng poınts out th...
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...ephants are aware of approaching death .Nevertheless,the listenıng poınts out that he true r...
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...nt for representing objects through art.However , the lıstenıng rejects thıs statement....
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...representing objects through art.However , the lıstenıng rejects thıs statement. A...
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...tterns for representıng the exact ımages .Third, the reading says that the elephan...
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...erns for representıng the exact ımages .Third, the reading says that the elephants ha...
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...to them not that they are afraıd of them . Those elephants living in the zoo dont ...
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...hem . Those elephants living in the zoo dont show any fright of mice ,because mıce a...
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... used to these small creatures very much .In another word, once elephants are accu...
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...sed to these small creatures very much .In another word, once elephants are accust...
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...ould not mind ıf they are around or not.In a nutshell, by giving all these three r...
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...fully goes against the readıng article.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, may, nevertheless, second, so, therefore, third, as to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 10.4613686534 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 5.04856512141 119% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 7.30242825607 82% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 12.0772626932 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 22.412803532 98% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 30.3222958057 106% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 5.01324503311 20% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1376.0 1373.03311258 100% => OK
No of words: 260.0 270.72406181 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.29230769231 5.08290768461 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.01553427287 4.04702891845 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67177753535 2.5805825403 104% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 145.348785872 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.65 0.540411800872 120% => OK
syllable_count: 384.3 419.366225166 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.23620309051 109% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 2.5761589404 233% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 13.0662251656 69% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 21.2450331126 132% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 88.3150924562 49.2860985944 179% => OK
Chars per sentence: 152.888888889 110.228320801 139% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.8888888889 21.698381199 133% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.0 7.06452816374 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 2.0 4.09492273731 49% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 17.0 4.19205298013 406% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 4.33554083885 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.27373068433 23% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.272083759551 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.0996497079465 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0662205650399 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.162205337803 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0443174109184 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.9 13.3589403974 134% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 53.8541721854 96% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.0289183223 118% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.99 12.2367328918 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.49 8.42419426049 101% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 63.6247240618 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.7273730684 98% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.498013245 126% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.2008830022 125% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted. The correct pattern:
para 1: introduction
para 2: doubt 1
para 3: doubt 2
para 4: doubt 3
Less contents wanted from the reading passages(25%), more content wanted from the lecture (75%).
Don't need a conclusion paragraph.
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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