TPO 6 Q1 integrated writing
The article discusses three main reasons that caused the communal online encyclopedias are not reliable compared with the traditional printed encyclopedias, however, the professor believes that these criticisms are not compelling and opposes each of the author’s reasons. First, according to the reading passage due to the communal online encyclopedias are written by any Internet users, therefore, they are inaccurate in many cases. In contrast, the professor claims, although the online might have some errors, the printed format have never been accurate too. The advantage of the online format is they can be edited very easily, while the traditional printed ones can convey the incorrect information for decades.
Second, in the reading passage, the writer puts forth the idea that some users or hackers might change delete, and fabricate the accurate the original information. However, the professor points out that this problem can simply be solved by two strategies: first, the online encyclopedias just access in the reading format. Second, some experts supervise the crucial materials to prevent them from changing.
Finally, in the reading passage, it is said that in the online format, there is any subject and it includes either important or unimportant information. On the other hand, the professor explains this is the merit of this format in comparison to the printed ones because online formats have unlimited space for saving materials. So, this way can meet the needs of a great variety of users. While the printed ones have limited space.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 389, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... the needs of a great variety of users. While the printed ones have limited space. ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, however, second, so, therefore, while, in contrast, in many cases, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 10.4613686534 105% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 5.04856512141 119% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 7.30242825607 68% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 12.0772626932 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 15.0 22.412803532 67% => OK
Preposition: 22.0 30.3222958057 73% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 5.01324503311 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1324.0 1373.03311258 96% => OK
No of words: 245.0 270.72406181 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.40408163265 5.08290768461 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.95632099841 4.04702891845 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72643895728 2.5805825403 106% => OK
Unique words: 139.0 145.348785872 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.567346938776 0.540411800872 105% => OK
syllable_count: 422.1 419.366225166 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.55342163355 109% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.23620309051 109% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.25165562914 240% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 2.5761589404 194% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 13.0662251656 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 21.2450331126 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.8268100959 49.2860985944 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.363636364 110.228320801 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2727272727 21.698381199 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.09090909091 7.06452816374 129% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.09492273731 73% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.27373068433 23% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.272083759551 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.0996497079465 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0662205650399 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.162205337803 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0443174109184 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 13.3589403974 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 53.8541721854 76% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.0289183223 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.34 12.2367328918 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.69 8.42419426049 115% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 63.6247240618 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.7273730684 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.498013245 103% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.2008830022 134% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted. The correct pattern:
para 1: introduction
para 2: doubt 1
para 3: doubt 2
para 4: doubt 3
Less contents wanted from the reading passages(25%), more content wanted from the lecture (75%).
Don't need a conclusion paragraph.
Read sample essays from ETS:
http://www.testbig.com/users/toeflwritingmaster
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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