Tpo13
The lecture disagrees with the article about losing the original fossils when the sale of them to private collectors. The passage states that both general public and the scientists would be affected negatively with that sell. He believes that public would not be able to see them, fossils would miss scientifical identification, and commercial fossil collectors usually destroy crucial evidence of many fossils. In contrast, the professor rebuffs those perspectives as the following.
Firstly, the listening passage states that it is wrong to believe that selling those fossils to private collectors would deprive the population of viewing them. In fact, several fossils are available for everyone to purchase, such as libraries and schools. They help those kinds of an institute to have some of that collection thus it would increase their educational values. The passage, on the other hand, states people would miss seeing those fossils in the museums, and this would destroy those fossil's value.
Secondly, the professor challenged the writer in the point of that fossils would miss the scientifical examination when to be sold to the private collectors. The professor believes specialists should examine each piece of fossil before selling them to the private collectors. Therefore, in this way, they would not miss the scientifical examination.
Finally, the professor casts doubt the passage with the fact of unofficial excavation leads to losing crucial evidence of those fossils. The professor in the lecture believes that even though several pieces of evidence would be missing and many pieces would be and to those millionaires privates collectors, still other fossils available for public, and the business of extracting them from the earth help many scientists to study them without waiting or needing for universities' permission. Their availably of those fossils to study overweighted the unofficial collection.
when the sale of them to private collectors.
during the sale of them to private collectors.
when to be sold to the private collectors.
Description: need a complete sentence after 'when'
the professor casts doubt the passage
the professor casts doubt on the passage //'casts doubt on'
the professor casts doubt the passage with the fact of unofficial excavation leads to losing crucial evidence of those fossils.
the professor casts doubt the passage with the fact of unofficial excavation which leads to losing crucial evidence of those fossils. //two verbs in one sentence.
Sentence: He believes that public would not be able to see them, fossils would miss scientifical identification, and commercial fossil collectors usually destroy crucial evidence of many fossils.
Error: scientifical Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: Secondly, the professor challenged the writer in the point of that fossils would miss the scientifical examination when to be sold to the private collectors.
Error: scientifical Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: Therefore, in this way, they would not miss the scientifical examination.
Error: scientifical Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: Their availably of those fossils to study overweighted the unofficial collection.
Error: overweighted Suggestion: No alternate word
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No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 4 2
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Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 22 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 4 2
No. of Sentences: 14 12
No. of Words: 296 250
No. of Characters: 1598 1200
No. of Different Words: 138 150
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.148 4.2
Average Word Length: 5.399 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.718 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 124 80
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 105 60
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 61 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 45 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.143 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.763 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.643 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.394 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.581 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.137 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4