TPO1.WRITING ABOUT DECREASING WORKING DAY
the main idea was about decreasing work time and narrator and author both were discussing merit and demerit of its. at the following paragraph, reasons for both will be mentioned.
the first point was mentioned by the author was about how the economy benefit of its.he thought it help to decrease overworking and employees spend more time with their family and it advance the quality of their life. he mentions reducing unemployment rate, he explained that by decreasing work time, for rest of work, new workers will be employ. on the other hand, the narrator rejected that and thought it cause some problems for employees. maybe they lost the chance to promote in their job and increase error at works. the second disadvantage he said was about job losing in the economic downtown. for example, many works may not be exit anymore.
the second equally important point was about this idea how affect on the company. at the same previous paragraph, together, the two would have a different idea. according to passage, it has some benefit for the company. he believed that by decreasing the working day, employees have more rest and it helps them to reduce their fault and error at work. it also decreases overworking. at the contrary lecture explain about problems may cause to the company . in his opinion it will be exceedingly hard to say this have profit for company because decreasing working day means more employees and more office and more computer,.. .so how it will help company.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...he economy benefit of its.he thought it help to decrease overworking and employees s...
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...pend more time with their family and it advance the quality of their life. he mentions ...
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...st of work, new workers will be employ. on the other hand, the narrator rejected t...
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...e narrator rejected that and thought it cause some problems for employees. maybe they...
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...t it cause some problems for employees. maybe they lost the chance to promote in thei...
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...ut job losing in the economic downtown. for example, many works may not be exit any...
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...important point was about this idea how affect on the company. at the same previous parag...
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...o reduce their fault and error at work. it also decreases overworking. at the cont...
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...at work. it also decreases overworking. at the contrary lecture explain about prob...
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...out problems may cause to the company . in his opinion it will be exceedingly hard...
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...loyees and more office and more computer,.. .so how it will help company.
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...oyees and more office and more computer,.. .so how it will help company.
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...es and more office and more computer,.. .so how it will help company.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, may, second, so, for example, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 10.4613686534 96% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 5.04856512141 139% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 7.30242825607 151% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 12.0772626932 25% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 22.412803532 120% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 29.0 30.3222958057 96% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 5.01324503311 40% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1238.0 1373.03311258 90% => OK
No of words: 253.0 270.72406181 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.89328063241 5.08290768461 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98822939669 4.04702891845 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49906672393 2.5805825403 97% => OK
Unique words: 138.0 145.348785872 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.545454545455 0.540411800872 101% => OK
syllable_count: 384.3 419.366225166 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 3.25607064018 184% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.23620309051 73% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 2.5761589404 233% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 13.0662251656 122% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 21.2450331126 71% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 48.3436590982 49.2860985944 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 77.375 110.228320801 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.8125 21.698381199 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 7.06452816374 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.09492273731 73% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 23.0 4.19205298013 549% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 4.33554083885 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.27373068433 94% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.237716182688 0.272083759551 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0769598672868 0.0996497079465 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0742901528014 0.0662205650399 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.17200903836 0.162205337803 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0331880860536 0.0443174109184 75% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.5 13.3589403974 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 53.8541721854 120% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 11.0289183223 73% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.79 12.2367328918 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.69 8.42419426049 91% => OK
difficult_words: 53.0 63.6247240618 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.7273730684 98% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.498013245 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.2008830022 71% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted. The correct pattern:
para 1: introduction
para 2: doubt 1
para 3: doubt 2
para 4: doubt 3
Less contents wanted from the reading passages(25%), more content wanted from the lecture (75%).
Don't need a conclusion paragraph.
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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