Tpo25- integrated writing

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Tpo25- integrated writing

The reading passage and listening are both about the pros and cons of excavation of vessels which contain small current power. The reading strongly postulates that it isn't prone to be used as electrical batteries in old times. On the other hand, The listening adamantly delineates that the author's points are not persuasive because of several compelling reasons.
First and foremost, According to the author of the excerpt that there are no proofs that any metals which are an essential part of electronic batteries were located nearby the vessel also all they found is just the vessel. Nonetheless, The professor offsets these points by declaring that the local people found this evidence, not an archaeologist so it is highly possible that they didn't recognise any critical details and maybe they overlooked or threw away.
On top of this, The professor in the lecture elaborates by bringing up the points that this data may demonstrate it is a combination of liquid and iron which are helped to create electricity even it identified same as a copper cylinder which discovered in aged ruins of Seleucia. Moreover, the early people invented this copper cylinder for the one purpose in the first time then they adopted it to produce another thing. these claims refute the author's indications about it is similar to another copper cylinder which is found in the neighbourhood is used as holding scrolls of divine texts not for producing electricity.
The text lastly insists that there is no sign to prove the early people used electricity because they hadn't any devices that depended on electrical power. The speaker in lecture counter these indications by asserting that they could use this power to heal other people like modern medical treatments such as relieve pain and muscles of therapy. Furthermore, it had just a little bit of power which felt with the help of touching the electricity in inconspicuous ways.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 168, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: isn't
...The reading strongly postulates that it isnt prone to be used as electrical batterie...
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Line 2, column 383, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...gist so it is highly possible that they didnt recognise any critical details and mayb...
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Line 3, column 423, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: These
...ey adopted it to produce another thing. these claims refute the authors indications a...
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Line 4, column 103, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: hadn't
...ly people used electricity because they hadnt any devices that depended on electrical...
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Line 4, column 372, Rule ID: LITTLE_BIT[1]
Message: Reduce redundancy by using 'little' or 'bit'.
Suggestion: little; bit
... of therapy. Furthermore, it had just a little bit of power which felt with the help of to...
^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, furthermore, if, lastly, look, may, moreover, nonetheless, so, then, another thing, such as, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 10.4613686534 134% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 5.04856512141 40% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 7.30242825607 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 12.0772626932 132% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 22.412803532 138% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 36.0 30.3222958057 119% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 5.01324503311 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1604.0 1373.03311258 117% => OK
No of words: 317.0 270.72406181 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05993690852 5.08290768461 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21953715646 4.04702891845 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68332088435 2.5805825403 104% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 145.348785872 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.555205047319 0.540411800872 103% => OK
syllable_count: 509.4 419.366225166 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.23620309051 97% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 13.0662251656 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 21.2450331126 132% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 53.79498886 49.2860985944 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 145.818181818 110.228320801 132% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.8181818182 21.698381199 133% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.1818181818 7.06452816374 158% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 4.19205298013 119% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 4.33554083885 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 4.45695364238 45% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.315411980554 0.272083759551 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.11032805822 0.0996497079465 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0613878744952 0.0662205650399 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.169591102614 0.162205337803 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0420151538044 0.0443174109184 95% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.8 13.3589403974 126% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 53.8541721854 80% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.0289183223 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.66 12.2367328918 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.91 8.42419426049 106% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 63.6247240618 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.7273730684 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.498013245 126% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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