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tpo50.integ

Both the reading and listening parts offer two opposite views about the possibility of sending a human to Mars. While the passage lists three problems of this trip to depict this mission cannot occur; the professor, on the other hand, presents three solutions for these problems, to show this trip's feasibility.

    First of all, the text discussed the long duration of this journey and the requirement of sufficient food, oxygen, and water for this period, which is against the vehicle's cargo limit. In contrast, the instructor refers to Hydroponic plants as the solution to this issue. As she describes, this plant relies on the water instead of soil for its growth and occupies small areas. So, the astronauts can cultivate food crops by this system and compactly have sufficient food resource. Moreover, this plant recycles the wastewater and releases the clean water vapor which could be used as the potable water source too. In addition, this plant as the other plants convert the CO2 to the oxygen, which can also be considered as a source of fresh air. Consequently, Hydroponics can be responsible for this issue.

   Another issue mentioned in the article is the side-effects of zero gravitation on the astronaut’s health; which severely causes the decrement of muscle mass and the bone density. Otherwise, the lecturer, by referring to the various long space trips taken recently, provides a clue that the negative impacts of this two-year trip can be assuaged by some techniques. As she explains, regular exercise prevents the degradation of muscle mass; furthermore, taking vitamin such as Vit D can prevent the decrement of bone density. Therefore, during this journey, the astronomers can do sport and take a vitamin to deal with these problems too.

   Finally, meanwhile, the passage lists the hazardous space radiation, as another issue of this trip; the professor, on the contrary, mentions a fact about this radiation which shows this danger is not that much severe as asserted in the text. According to her explanation, this radiation is not consistence and occurred confessionally. Thus, the astronauts can use a light-weighted monitor to detect when the spaceship exposed to this radiation, and with moveable and small shield protect this vehicle from this danger.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...r for this period, which is against the vehicles cargo limit. In contrast, the instructo...
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...cs can be responsible for this issue.    Another issue mentioned in the article i...
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...amin to deal with these problems too.    Finally, meanwhile, the passage lists th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, finally, first, furthermore, moreover, so, therefore, thus, while, in addition, in contrast, such as, first of all, on the contrary, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 10.4613686534 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 5.04856512141 178% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 7.30242825607 151% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 12.0772626932 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 22.412803532 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 30.3222958057 142% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 5.01324503311 279% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1940.0 1373.03311258 141% => OK
No of words: 369.0 270.72406181 136% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.25745257453 5.08290768461 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38284983912 4.04702891845 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90497966986 2.5805825403 113% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 145.348785872 140% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.552845528455 0.540411800872 102% => OK
syllable_count: 574.2 419.366225166 137% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 3.25607064018 123% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.23620309051 109% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 1.25165562914 320% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 2.5761589404 311% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 13.0662251656 122% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 21.2450331126 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.108008342 49.2860985944 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.25 110.228320801 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0625 21.698381199 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.625 7.06452816374 150% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 4.19205298013 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 4.45695364238 157% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.27373068433 94% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.272083759551 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.0996497079465 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0662205650399 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.162205337803 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0443174109184 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 13.3589403974 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 53.8541721854 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.0289183223 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 12.2367328918 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.31 8.42419426049 111% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 63.6247240618 167% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.7273730684 103% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.498013245 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.2008830022 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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