In the United States, medical information about patients traditionally has been recorded and stored on paper forms. However, there are efforts to persuade doctors to adopt electronic medical record systems in which information about patients is stored in electronic databases rather than on paper. It is argued that storing patients' medical records in electronic databases has several advantages over traditional paper-based record keeping. Reducing Costs First, the use of electronic records can help reduce costs by saving money on storing and transferring medical records. While paper records require a significant amount of storage space, electronic medical records take up virtually no space. Moreover, by having patients' records computerized in databases, doctors can easily access the records from almost anywhere and can easily duplicate and transfer them when necessary. This costs much less than copying, faxing, or transporting paper records from one location to another. Preventing Errors Second, electronic medical records are crucial to reducing the chances of medical errors. Illegible handwriting, improper transcription of data, and nonstandard organization of paper records have caused errors that in some cases have had serious consequences for the patients* health. In contrast, electronic records are associated with standardization of forms and legible computer fonts and thus minimize the possibility of human error Aiding Research Third, electronic medical records can greatly aid medical research by making it possible to gather large amounts of data from patient records. It is often impractical, impossible, or prohibitively expensive to manually go through thousands of patients’ paper records housed in doctors' offices. However, with the existence of electronic medical records, it would be simple to draw out the needed information from the medical databases because the databases are already formatted for data collection. Once in the electronic system, the records could be accessed from any research location.
The passage and the lecture are both about computerized the data in the medical organizations, which is using technology instead of papers and pins. The author believes that electronic databases have many advantages and features than the old paper methods. The lecturer casts doubts on the claims made in the article, she thinks that is impossible to be able to pass up the papers in the medical field. Also, she exposes the problems caused by this modern procedure.
First of all, the author points out to the expenses' saving. It is mentioned that digital records will reduce storage and material costs. The point challenged by the lecturer. She elaborates that the cost will not be reduced, also will be significantly huge. Indeed, almost all the doctors that start using the electronic medical system, they keep using the pin and papers for recipes or prescriptions. Moreover, doctors need to save their data by keeping backup data which they use the paper for it. This duplicated usage is raising the expenses.
Secondly, the author contends that medical errors caused by peoples mistakes will be dropped. The article notes that nonunderstanding handwriting or unclear paper records could result in a truth issue. The lecturer rebuts this argument. She suggests that using technology is not always can avoid errors. Doctors usually use the pin in their prescription, mistakes can always happen. All the data should be recorded by the poor secretary. Mistakes cant be illuminated in such a case.
Finally, the author states that medical data will be easier to access. The availability for patient's fills will help the new healthy researches. The lecturer, on the other hand, posits that the patient's data is not easy to be accessed for medical researches. There are lots of rules in law prevent publicized the personal information. The privacy is allowing the people to block any personal information and require a lot of permission in order to use it.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...oblems caused by this modern procedure. First of all, the author points out to t...
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Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...ecorded by the poor secretary. Mistakes cant be illuminated in such a case. Final...
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'patients'' or 'patient's'?
Suggestion: patients'; patient's
...rer, on the other hand, posits that the patients data is not easy to be accessed for med...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 10.4613686534 163% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 5.04856512141 218% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 8.0 7.30242825607 110% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 12.0772626932 99% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 22.412803532 107% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 30.3222958057 99% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.01324503311 80% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1645.0 1373.03311258 120% => OK
No of words: 322.0 270.72406181 119% => OK
Chars per words: 5.10869565217 5.08290768461 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23607819155 4.04702891845 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71391081454 2.5805825403 105% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 145.348785872 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.546583850932 0.540411800872 101% => OK
syllable_count: 513.9 419.366225166 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 3.25607064018 215% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 12.0 8.23620309051 146% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 13.0662251656 176% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 21.2450331126 66% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.1582674371 49.2860985944 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 71.5217391304 110.228320801 65% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.0 21.698381199 65% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.08695652174 7.06452816374 58% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 4.19205298013 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 4.33554083885 185% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 4.45695364238 224% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.27373068433 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.178582229274 0.272083759551 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0441346389725 0.0996497079465 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0435800833191 0.0662205650399 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.107473021201 0.162205337803 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.017979690008 0.0443174109184 41% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 13.3589403974 72% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.27 53.8541721854 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.8 11.0289183223 80% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.77 12.2367328918 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.84 8.42419426049 105% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 63.6247240618 145% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.7273730684 79% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.498013245 72% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 63.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.0 Out of 30
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