We have heard many people talking in recent times about the potential for exploiting the ocean floor for resources, and the future of aquamarine agriculture. and write y This just demonstrates that after we have finished with the destruction on land, we will transfer all our unsustainable practices onto the oceans.
First, the only way to get to the minerals that are at the bottom of the seas, we have to devastate the ecosystems that are found there. We don't know exactly where the resources are so we would have to tear apart a lot territory that's under the water. This would profoundly impact the sea life that is tied to the ocean floor.
Moreover, this will raise a lot of sand and dust from the bottom that will pollute the water, let's not even talk about the poisonous waste products that will get into the sea currents which might circulate all over the globe. This would affect the animals that are inhabiting the water all the way up to 1000 meters of depth. This accounts for more than 90 percent of ocean dwellers.
Finally, the same destruction will happen with the aquamarine agriculture. A lot of fish, like salmon and tuna, will be restricted to a small space so they could be properly fed, grown and then harvested. They would be in a pen, but for fish. This would concentrate their bodily waste in a small area. A negative, and significant, impact would be done to the surrounding ecosystems and it would have a negative effect on the quality of the fish that is being farmed.
The reading and lecture are both about the potential for exploiting the ocean floor for resources and aquamarine agriculture's future. The author of the reading feels that we will damage the ocean beds once we are done with exploiting the land for our needs. The lecturer challenges the claims by the author. She is of the opinion that through ocean farming there won't be such detrimental effect to the ocean or the lives of the animals habiting in it.
To begin with, the author argues that way to get these resources will only lead to disturbing the ocean environment. The article metions that, since we dont't know the exact location of these resoruces, our techniques will only scrape out the whole floors beneath the water. The specific argument is challenged by the lecturer. He claims that with current techniques no wide area is required to pin point the location, only small holes will be drilled to test for the site selection. Additionally, he says through this method only small portion of the sea life might get actually affected.
Secondly, the writer suggets because of these mining lots of sand and dust particles will cause pollution of the water. In the article, it said that chances are that poisonous waste is also released into the sea, which might penetrate thousands of meters into the waters affecting the marine life. The lecturer, however rebuts, this by mentioning that there will be minimal to no circulation of the particles in the water. Also it will be made sure that the place where technique is used is cleared from any marine life it by 500 miles in radius.
Finally, the author posits that marine agriculture will be destroyed by restricting lots of fishes in a small zone. Moreover, in the article it is stated that such situation may lead to concentration of the waste from these fishes in that particular zone producing a negative effect to the whole ecosystem. In contrast, the lecturer's postion is that, since there is population of 5 billion people on the planet the deamd for food is eventually going to outpace supply. So it will be better to not only depend on the land meat but also be dependent on the meat from the sea. The farming methods used to harvest these fishes will be located in a deserted region of the sea which will have no particular impact on to the ecosystem of the ocean. Hence, there will be plenty of space for the fishes to live.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 260, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...with exploiting the land for our needs. The lecturer challenges the claims by the a...
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Line 3, column 424, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...culation of the particles in the water. Also it will be made sure that the place whe...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, finally, hence, however, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, in contrast, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 10.4613686534 210% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 5.04856512141 297% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 5.0 7.30242825607 68% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 12.0772626932 132% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 22.412803532 152% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 63.0 30.3222958057 208% => Less preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 12.0 5.01324503311 239% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1978.0 1373.03311258 144% => OK
No of words: 419.0 270.72406181 155% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.72076372315 5.08290768461 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52432199235 4.04702891845 112% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48378637423 2.5805825403 96% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 145.348785872 144% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.498806682578 0.540411800872 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 625.5 419.366225166 149% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 3.25607064018 184% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.23620309051 134% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 2.5761589404 233% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 13.0662251656 145% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 21.2450331126 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.8211325493 49.2860985944 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.105263158 110.228320801 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0526315789 21.698381199 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.94736842105 7.06452816374 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 4.33554083885 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 4.45695364238 247% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.27373068433 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.231331410668 0.272083759551 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0715818780338 0.0996497079465 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0886177959313 0.0662205650399 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.149177098127 0.162205337803 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.109189630301 0.0443174109184 246% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 13.3589403974 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 53.8541721854 107% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.0289183223 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.1 12.2367328918 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.38 8.42419426049 99% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 63.6247240618 152% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.7273730684 103% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.498013245 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.2008830022 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 68.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.5 Out of 30
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