Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Television advertising directed toward young children(aged two to five) should not be allowed. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Children born in the 21st century are more attracted to gadgets with screens than any other teenagers are. One can see how quickly they understand the use of these gadgets by observing and learning from their surrounding adults. This seems a bit scary; hence, I personally believe that young kids between the ages of two to five should be protected from the traps of these television advertisements. I feel this way for several reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, if adults like us who have experienced and observed this fast growing world and knowing subconsciously that marketing and advertising companies design and portray their advertisement in such a way that even the smartest gets lured into the television screen. Then what do you think will have an effect on the young generations? My personal experience is a compelling example of this. My younger brother was 5 years old, when I was 12 years old. Since we had recently moved to our new house and he being a shy kid did not have many friends. Therefore, he would stay in the house after school watching television shows with my mother. After a point, I noticed that he too got addicted to watching these shows and started adopting the behavior characteristics of the characters in the show. My father was not happy about it and suggested my mother to limit his exposure to the television. However, my mother during that point did not take the situation so seriously until one day he saw an advertisement for an Apple iPhone and just could not stop from nagging about it to my parents to buy for him. That day we all realized that how naïve these young children are and what influence a simple advertisement can have on their minds.
Secondly, there are programs and master’s degree courses for studying marketing and advertising. The advertising moto of any big company is to attract customers. Nevertheless, who is there to say whether the practices of these advertising agencies is fair enough? In simple words, companies want to earn money and with the fast-growing competitive world, everybody just wants to earn quick money not caring about the people around us. For instance, it took almost 25 years for the Indian government to realize that how demeaning and narrow-minded the advertisement of glowing cosmetics was until the Supreme Court passed an order to ban this insulting practice. Unfortunately, these kinds of advertising left a mark on the citizens of India that fair-tone people are better looking as compared to dark.
In conclusion, I am of the opinion that we should protect our younger children from these advertisements. This is because it could have a detrimental influence at a very early age, which could cause a severe problem in the long run, and also because the motivation of every advertisement is to attract customers but there is little to no supervision of how ethical these advertisements are.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 512, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'is'.
Suggestion: is
... recently moved to our new house and he being a shy kid did not have many friends. Th...
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Line 3, column 414, Rule ID: NOUN_AROUND_IT[1]
Message: Consider using 'the surrounding people'?
Suggestion: the surrounding people
...ts to earn quick money not caring about the people around us. For instance, it took almost 25 years ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, if, look, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 59.0 43.0788530466 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2433.0 1977.66487455 123% => OK
No of words: 495.0 407.700716846 121% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91515151515 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71684168287 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88547230332 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 280.0 212.727598566 132% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.565656565657 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 754.2 618.680645161 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.4576226987 48.9658058833 132% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.590909091 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5 20.6045352989 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.63636363636 5.45110844103 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.146522727007 0.236089414692 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0414147452261 0.076458572812 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0392193387764 0.0737576698707 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0909918695627 0.150856017488 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0387881820407 0.0645574589148 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.17 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 86.8835125448 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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