whether or not electronic medical records, which doctors store information of patients in electronic databases, outweigh paper forms
Both the passage and the lecture talk about whether or not electronic medical records, which doctors store information of patients in electronic databases, outweigh paper forms. The author of the extract asserts that using electronic form instead of paper forms in medical recording has several advantages and provides three reasons to empower this opinion. In the contrast, the professor in the lecture casts doubt on this assertion and denies each of the reasons brought in the article.
First and foremost, according to the author of the excerpt, such a replacement, using electronic databases instead of paper ones, will reduce the costs because they need anymore to store and transfer records on paper. However, the professor in the lecture refutes this claim by stating that doctors will always use paper forms because some possible emergencies. For instance, in some situation they need patients' signature. She mentions that doctors who adopt electronic databases will keep paper forms too. By seeing this issue, it is not true that this substitution can reduce the costs.
The professor in the lecture further maintains that when we see a doctor use electronic records system, it would not mean that they themselves don't use paper forms. In fact, doctors write information and description on papers, and after that their offices' staffs will record them in electronic versions. This declaration rebuts the writer implication that using electronic records minimize amount of error caused by humans. There are still someones, doctors, that use handwriting and someones, offices' staffs of doctors, who must interpret it to record electronically.
The text lasting insists that when doctors recorded patients' information in electronic databases, it would bring other doctors to access all information their patients' past. Nevertheless, the professor in the lecture opposes this indication by referring to the strict privacy laws in the United States. She says that if doctors wanted to collect data, not only would they follow some procedures, but also they must have patients' permissions. On top of all these, this process will not be guaranteed since some patients block their information due to different purposes.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 45, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
... the passage and the lecture talk about whether or not electronic medical records, which docto...
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Line 4, column 144, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
... it would not mean that they themselves dont use paper forms. In fact, doctors write...
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Line 6, column 53, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'patients'' or 'patient's'?
Suggestion: patients'; patient's
...ting insists that when doctors recorded patients information in electronic databases, it...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, nevertheless, so, still, for instance, in fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 10.4613686534 29% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 5.04856512141 257% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 10.0 7.30242825607 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 12.0772626932 132% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 22.412803532 165% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 41.0 30.3222958057 135% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 5.01324503311 279% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1881.0 1373.03311258 137% => OK
No of words: 347.0 270.72406181 128% => OK
Chars per words: 5.42074927954 5.08290768461 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31600926901 4.04702891845 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69522868328 2.5805825403 104% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 145.348785872 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.518731988473 0.540411800872 96% => OK
syllable_count: 566.1 419.366225166 135% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 3.25607064018 246% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 6.0 8.23620309051 73% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 2.5761589404 233% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 13.0662251656 122% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 21.2450331126 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.9324334585 49.2860985944 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.5625 110.228320801 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6875 21.698381199 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.8125 7.06452816374 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 4.19205298013 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 4.33554083885 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.27373068433 211% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.41457221523 0.272083759551 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.137853691178 0.0996497079465 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.169328191164 0.0662205650399 256% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.266124863483 0.162205337803 164% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.138873654309 0.0443174109184 313% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 13.3589403974 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 53.8541721854 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.0289183223 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.16 12.2367328918 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.45 8.42419426049 100% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 63.6247240618 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.7273730684 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.498013245 99% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.2008830022 134% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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