'It is as important for school children to study music, art and sport as it is for them to become literate and numerate.' How far do you agree with this statement? Support your point of view with reasons and/or examples from your own experience
Comparing the subjects like music, arts and sports with science and mathematics have initiated a new debate among educational scholars. A few people believe that subjects like music, arts and sports are essential as mathematics and science, whereas a few people tend to believe that subjects like mathematics and science have greater value in the curriculum. This essay will discuss the importance of studying subjects like science and mathematics over sports, arts and music.
First of all, subjects like music, arts and sports do not develop intelligent quotient in children. Furthermore, these subjects have positive impacts on a psychological and physical aspect of children, whereas science and mathematics will develop intelligent quotient in children which will help him to succeed in life. For instance, research conducted by the renowned University of America revealed that IQ has a key role in children at a younger age. In contrast, intelligent quotient possesses great importance in children's lives than physical aspects.
Second of all, people having degrees in science and mathematics have more job opportunities than people who have degrees in sports, arts and music. In addition, the world is growing in terms of science and technology which creates more opportunities for people from science and mathematics background. As an illustration, as per the finding of Gallop Consulting India requires ten millions of people in science and technology in the next ten years. Overall, people from science and mathematics background have more career opportunities in the future.
All things considered, looking at the future aspects children studying science and mathematics have tons of benefits and opportunities when compared with children studying music, arts and sports. In my opinion, schools must give high preference to subjects like science and mathematics over music, arts and sports.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use a singular form of the numeral here: 'ten million'.
Suggestion: ten million
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, if, look, second, whereas, for instance, in addition, in contrast, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 10.5418719212 19% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 6.10837438424 65% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 8.36945812808 251% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 7.0 5.94088669951 118% => OK
Pronoun: 7.0 20.9802955665 33% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 31.9359605911 138% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 5.75862068966 313% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1622.0 1207.87684729 134% => OK
No of words: 291.0 242.827586207 120% => OK
Chars per words: 5.57388316151 5.00649968141 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13022058845 3.92707691288 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92316068467 2.71678728327 108% => OK
Unique words: 140.0 139.433497537 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.481099656357 0.580463131201 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 486.9 379.143842365 128% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.57093596059 108% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.6157635468 43% => OK
Article: 2.0 1.56157635468 128% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.71428571429 117% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.931034482759 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 3.65517241379 82% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 12.6551724138 103% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.5024630542 107% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.8156484668 50.4703680194 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.769230769 104.977214359 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3846153846 20.9669160288 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.76923076923 7.25397266985 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.12807881773 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.33497536946 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 6.9802955665 158% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 2.75862068966 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 2.91625615764 69% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.135188415201 0.242375264174 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0655356858527 0.0925447433944 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0424447709683 0.071462118173 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0968498215125 0.151781067708 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0347299891776 0.0609392437508 57% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 12.6369458128 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 53.1260098522 77% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.54236453202 171% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 10.9458128079 120% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.32 11.5310837438 133% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.36 8.32886699507 100% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 55.0591133005 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.94827586207 121% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.3980295567 104% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.5123152709 105% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 63.0 Out of 90
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