The vast majority of museums and historical sites are now foreign tourists rather than local people. This essay will delve both the underlying causes and offer possible approaches to draw attention from local residents.
The rarity of local visiters could be attributed to the prohibitively expensive ticket fee in addition to the unpreceded choices of entertainment that is available today. Firstly, the cost of entry fee is escalating over the years in term of the government cut on budget spending on maintaining and operating museums. Indeed, people transfer the sum of money to other needs of society like social welfare, childcare, colledge grants, in other words they do not prioritise the museum which instill the historical values and have the key role to spread the artistic spirit of the artists. For example, in the US, the goverment want to guarantee staff salary along with the explosion in population make many museums face closure due to the limited budget to pay for front-of-house staff so they have less choice except increase the fee expense. On top of that, human have an abundance of entertaining such as cinema, music concert or supermarket, as a result, they might not prefer to go to museum or historical sites that is considered tedious. Few people might seem to show interest and curiosty in their nation culture or history, instead they would be more estatic to engage in shopping or chilling at the bar. To sum up, scarcely do local people pay visit to the museums may linked to the relatively high cost and diversed entertaining choices.
To address the issue, the economic base should be targeted by raising fund from non-profit organisation and with the financial assistance, the museums curators could open more exhibition and gain access to the public. Nowadays, many have concern over the fall in available museums number which can lead to the detrimental culture and history, so that they would be willing to fund and support the museums. For instance, CEOs could go to the SharkTank tv show and seek for investment via convincing investors to contribute to remain the historical values. Besides, in order to spark interest in the public to go to museum to contemplate the pieces of art, executive director of marketing should advertise the exhibition sticked with the name of the acclaimed artists like Picasso, Van Gogh which can effectively drive attention. And widening the content of exhibition demonstated could sound tempting to people. For example, besides the ruins of war, more content could be brought like construction builded by chocolate, instant noodle or maybe match with young children hobby, comics. By and large, the lack of local visiters could be addressed by raising fund from other sources and adding more thing to the galleries.
To conclude, fewer indigenous resident go to museums and historical sites compared to the amount of overseas visiters; however, solutions like raising fund, diversifying the galleries could be implied to encourage local people.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, first, firstly, however, if, may, so, still, for example, for instance, in addition, such as, as a result, by and large, in other words, to sum up, on top of that
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 10.5418719212 104% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 6.10837438424 278% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 20.0 8.36945812808 239% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 7.0 5.94088669951 118% => OK
Pronoun: 12.0 20.9802955665 57% => OK
Preposition: 82.0 31.9359605911 257% => Less preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 16.0 5.75862068966 278% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2536.0 1207.87684729 210% => Less number of characters wanted.
No of words: 491.0 242.827586207 202% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.1649694501 5.00649968141 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70728369723 3.92707691288 120% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73221091823 2.71678728327 101% => OK
Unique words: 270.0 139.433497537 194% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.549898167006 0.580463131201 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 790.2 379.143842365 208% => syllable counts are too long.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.57093596059 102% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.6157635468 43% => OK
Article: 7.0 1.56157635468 448% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 1.71428571429 117% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.931034482759 107% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 3.65517241379 246% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 12.6551724138 134% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 20.5024630542 137% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 55.3267738361 50.4703680194 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 149.176470588 104.977214359 142% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.8823529412 20.9669160288 138% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.3529411765 7.25397266985 143% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.12807881773 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.33497536946 56% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 6.9802955665 158% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 2.75862068966 109% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 2.91625615764 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.271655716348 0.242375264174 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0867622352795 0.0925447433944 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0651386310637 0.071462118173 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.17544873648 0.151781067708 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0268493855213 0.0609392437508 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.3 12.6369458128 137% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 53.1260098522 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.54236453202 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 10.9458128079 130% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.24 11.5310837438 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.59 8.32886699507 115% => OK
difficult_words: 142.0 55.0591133005 258% => Less difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.94827586207 121% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.3980295567 127% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.5123152709 133% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 77.7777777778 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 70.0 Out of 90
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