As a result of advances in medical care, average life expectancy is increasing for men and women. Do you think most people would see it as a positive development ? What are the advantages of an ageing population for individuals and society ?Support your point of view with reasons and/or examples from your own experience or observations.
Medical science has made enormous progress in the recent years due to which even the most dangerous and life threatening diseases are curable. This has resulted in increased life expectancy for both men and women. Although, many people would consider this as a positive development this can also have some negative consequences on the individuals as well as the society.
On the one hand, medical science has been able to find the cure to many life threatening diseases. For example, diseases like cancer, aids, blood pressure and heart issues were considered to be incurable. But with the advancements in medicine people can be treated and they can live longer. As a result, they can spend precious years of their lives with their near and dear one's.
On the other hand, as the people grow older so does their problems after the medical treatment. To illustrate, the treatment of rare diseases are costly and most of the times people end up spending all of their life's savings in the treatment and care. As a result, they are seen as a burden by their family. Moreover, the life that they have left is spent mostly bedridden or on medicines.
In contrast, people who remain healthy after the treatment keep working longer but their efficiencies go down. This results in reduced productivity and increased unemployment among younger population because of the fewer jobs available. Ultimately, the growth of the society comes to a standstill because of these issues.
To recapitulate, the advancements in medical care has been significant and had several benefits but it can sometimes cause harm to the individuals and society as well.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 68, Rule ID: MANY_FEW_UNCOUNTABLE[2]
Message: Use 'much' or 'little' with uncountable nouns.
Suggestion: much; little
...ience has been able to find the cure to many life threatening diseases. For example,...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, moreover, so, still, well, for example, in contrast, as a result, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 10.5418719212 85% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 6.10837438424 98% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 8.36945812808 167% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 5.94088669951 50% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 20.9802955665 81% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 31.9359605911 113% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 5.75862068966 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1377.0 1207.87684729 114% => OK
No of words: 272.0 242.827586207 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0625 5.00649968141 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.06108636974 3.92707691288 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73793900826 2.71678728327 101% => OK
Unique words: 157.0 139.433497537 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.577205882353 0.580463131201 99% => OK
syllable_count: 431.1 379.143842365 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.57093596059 102% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.6157635468 87% => OK
Article: 4.0 1.56157635468 256% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 1.71428571429 175% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.931034482759 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 3.65517241379 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 12.6551724138 119% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.5024630542 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.8703851852 50.4703680194 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.8 104.977214359 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1333333333 20.9669160288 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.33333333333 7.25397266985 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.12807881773 121% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.33497536946 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 6.9802955665 100% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 2.75862068966 217% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 2.91625615764 69% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.250236885045 0.242375264174 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0804900767459 0.0925447433944 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0727915383844 0.071462118173 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.131743025682 0.151781067708 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.064233320208 0.0609392437508 105% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 12.6369458128 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 53.1260098522 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.54236453202 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.9458128079 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.77 11.5310837438 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.42 8.32886699507 101% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 55.0591133005 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.94827586207 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.3980295567 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.5123152709 86% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 67.5 Out of 90
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