Some countries encourage teenagers to have a part-time job and see it as a good thing, while others disagree. Give your opinion and explain both views.
It is observed that young people in some countries are advised to gain experience through temporary jobs as it is beneficial not only to themselves but also to their families. On the contrary, others including myself regard this as undesirable since the negative impacts caused outweigh its positive impacts.
People in favor of this practice claim that allowing individuals to experience and feel being in a working environment at an early age would give them a better perspective on what they would want for their future career. Furthermore, being able to discover and learn one's skills earlier would give them enough time to develop it. Other than that, the money they will earn would be a great help to support their financial needs while studying.
However, there are some who oppose this idea because it imposes a grave threat to a person's education. Teenagers tend to be complacent whenever they experience financial independence from their parents. Thus, usually, situations end up having them disregard the importance of education. Aside from that, having a part-time job causes a delay in one's education since time needs to be divided between work and studies. Students who want to have an ideal load at school while having a job are bound to receive lower grades as a result.
In my opinion, at a teenage level, one's primary focus should be schooling. If a person has the necessary resources to support himself in being a full-time student then he should not allow any disruption to finish his course as early as possible. It is undeniable that having a part-time job brings good things but since it is harmful to a person's education then I am strongly against it.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, so, then, thus, while, as a result, in my opinion, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 10.5418719212 133% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 6.10837438424 115% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 8.36945812808 60% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 5.94088669951 118% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 20.9802955665 157% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 37.0 31.9359605911 116% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 5.75862068966 191% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1398.0 1207.87684729 116% => OK
No of words: 283.0 242.827586207 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.93992932862 5.00649968141 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10153676581 3.92707691288 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65361378999 2.71678728327 98% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 139.433497537 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.618374558304 0.580463131201 107% => OK
syllable_count: 442.8 379.143842365 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.57093596059 102% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.6157635468 43% => OK
Article: 1.0 1.56157635468 64% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.71428571429 58% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.931034482759 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 3.65517241379 109% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 12.6551724138 103% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.5024630542 102% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.1297341503 50.4703680194 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.538461538 104.977214359 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.7692307692 20.9669160288 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.92307692308 7.25397266985 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.12807881773 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.33497536946 94% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 6.9802955665 100% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 2.75862068966 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 2.91625615764 69% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.210143149697 0.242375264174 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0708342777029 0.0925447433944 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0509294853583 0.071462118173 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.118983173392 0.151781067708 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0436773663403 0.0609392437508 72% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 12.6369458128 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 53.1260098522 94% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.54236453202 47% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.9458128079 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.37 11.5310837438 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.86 8.32886699507 106% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 55.0591133005 136% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.94827586207 141% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.3980295567 100% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.5123152709 114% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 88.8888888889 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 80.0 Out of 90
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.