Some people think placing advertisements in schools is a great resource for public schools that need additional funding. Others think it exploits children by treating them as a captive audience for corporate sponsors. Choose which position you most agree with and discuss why you chose that position. Support your point of view with details from your own experiences, observations or reading.
Few individuals believe that posting commercial ads in academic institutions is a prime means for government-owned schools to raise funds. However, others feel that it only utilized young generations by controlling them for business purposes. I firmly support the latter proposition due to children being vulnerable and that they have not develop critical thinking.
To begin with, advertisements in the form of billboards, tarpaulin and other print ads can be observed in some learning facilities. These has a tremendous effect on the students as their minds are naturally curious and active. This holds true for the fact that children at an early age can be easily influenced by anything they see on their environment. Conversely, they would ask for their parents to buy them the products they saw on the ads. To illustrate this, items that are prohibited for children\'s use such as hair colors and make-up can be bought without thinking of the consequence it may have to toddlers upon use.
Apart from this, younger individuals still have soft and lucid minds. Although they can be easily attracted to advertisements, proper guidance will help them understands the usage and functions of products they witness on ads. Without the control of what they are purchasing solely based on their attraction and persuaded by the pictures on the commercial postings can be deleterious to how children will grow. They may think that this particular item is beneficial to them even though in reality, it may damage their development as a person. For example, the memory enhancer medicines have a prescription to who is only intended for use, as a result youngsters would ask to have one from their parents not considering the adverse effect to their health.
To recapitulate, the use of advertisement especially when posted in schools could have several disadvantage as what is stated above. Indeed, it is the educational facility to decide whether to allow it or not.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 340, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'developed'.
Suggestion: developed
...being vulnerable and that they have not develop critical thinking. To begin with, ad...
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Line 7, column 88, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun disadvantage seems to be countable; consider using: 'several disadvantages'.
Suggestion: several disadvantages
...ially when posted in schools could have several disadvantage as what is stated above. Indeed, it is ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
conversely, however, may, so, still, apart from, for example, such as, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 10.5418719212 133% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 6.10837438424 213% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 8.0 8.36945812808 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 5.94088669951 135% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 20.9802955665 172% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 44.0 31.9359605911 138% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 5.75862068966 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1651.0 1207.87684729 137% => OK
No of words: 320.0 242.827586207 132% => OK
Chars per words: 5.159375 5.00649968141 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22948505376 3.92707691288 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97422357253 2.71678728327 109% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 139.433497537 136% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.590625 0.580463131201 102% => OK
syllable_count: 507.6 379.143842365 134% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.57093596059 102% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.6157635468 152% => OK
Article: 2.0 1.56157635468 128% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.71428571429 117% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.931034482759 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 3.65517241379 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 12.6551724138 119% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.5024630542 102% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.1183957862 50.4703680194 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.066666667 104.977214359 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3333333333 20.9669160288 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.46666666667 7.25397266985 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.12807881773 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.33497536946 37% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 6.9802955665 100% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 2.75862068966 72% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 2.91625615764 206% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.146750110423 0.242375264174 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.049771141711 0.0925447433944 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0350513565976 0.071462118173 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0953627016515 0.151781067708 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0320543277755 0.0609392437508 53% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 12.6369458128 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 53.1260098522 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.54236453202 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.9458128079 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 11.5310837438 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.37 8.32886699507 113% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 55.0591133005 173% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.94827586207 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.3980295567 100% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.5123152709 86% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 72.0 Out of 90
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