Some people think placing advertisements in schools is a great resource for public schools that need additional funding but others think it exploits children by treating them as a captive audience for corporate sponsors. Choose which position you most agree with and discuss why you chose that position. Support your point of view with details from your own experiences, observations and reading?
The role of placing adverts in school premises and corridors is controversial and has drawn attention from the public. While many academics claim that this helps to boost the funding for schools, but others argue that it has some serious consequences on children. In my view, schools should never promote such strategies to collect money. This essay will further elaborate on both sides and thus, will lead to a logical conclusion.
To begin with, schools are a natural learning environment and by placing adverts or promoting brands, the whole purpose of the school gets diverted. Moreover, schools offer a platform to learn and train the younger ones, but using them as an intentional customer can distract them and lose focus on their studies. For instance, posting images of famous celebs or personalities promoting alcohol can lead to binge drinking habits which is unacceptable. Thus, schools should highly be involved in child development and plan to do things only in favour of them.
Nevertheless, there are some advantages that can overwhelm the potential impacts of hoardings and banners posted in the school premises. The most conspicuous one is that there are often low or middle budget schools that lack funds or grants and by this, it will help to support the schools. For example, small budget schools that educate poor children, investing money on adverts can bring a stream of revenue or attract governments grants. Hence, raising money from advertisements can become a resource to meet the study expenses of many impoverished children.
This essay discussed how placing advertisements in the schools as a source of revenue and a damage to their future. In my opinion, schools should never promote such adverts in their premises that divert students from their path.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 91, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'damage'.
Suggestion: damage
... the schools as a source of revenue and a damage to their future. In my opinion, schools...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, hence, moreover, nevertheless, so, thus, while, for example, for instance, in my opinion, in my view, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 10.5418719212 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 6.10837438424 180% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 8.36945812808 203% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 8.0 5.94088669951 135% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 20.9802955665 105% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 31.9359605911 113% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.75862068966 69% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1500.0 1207.87684729 124% => OK
No of words: 290.0 242.827586207 119% => OK
Chars per words: 5.1724137931 5.00649968141 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12666770723 3.92707691288 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71643607881 2.71678728327 100% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 139.433497537 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.586206896552 0.580463131201 101% => OK
syllable_count: 438.3 379.143842365 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.57093596059 95% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.6157635468 65% => OK
Article: 3.0 1.56157635468 192% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.71428571429 58% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.931034482759 215% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 3.65517241379 82% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 12.6551724138 111% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.5024630542 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 24.5048933056 50.4703680194 49% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 107.142857143 104.977214359 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7142857143 20.9669160288 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.57142857143 7.25397266985 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.12807881773 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.33497536946 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 6.9802955665 72% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 2.75862068966 254% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 2.91625615764 69% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.238745010336 0.242375264174 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.081444117823 0.0925447433944 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0344584229803 0.071462118173 48% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.143072554251 0.151781067708 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0298130250431 0.0609392437508 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 12.6369458128 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 53.1260098522 112% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.54236453202 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.9458128079 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 11.5310837438 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.98 8.32886699507 108% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 55.0591133005 145% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.94827586207 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.3980295567 96% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.5123152709 95% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 77.7777777778 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 70.0 Out of 90
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