Some people think placing advertisements in schools is a great resource for public schools that need additional funding, but others think it exploits childrenby treating them as a captive audience for corporate sponsors. Choose which position you most agree with and discuss why you chose that position. Support your point of view with details from your own experiences, observations or reading.
Advertisements has taken an eminent role in the business world. Most of the advertisements attract the people and the marketing strategy in the business field is increasing. Now a days, as part of the funding process public schools takes the advantages of advertisements and sponsorship and some times which can exploit children by treating them as a captive audience. This essay will discuss what are the main benefits of making advertisements in schools and how it will help in children's future.
Advertisements have lots of positive side though which are meant for marketing and business purposes it help the people to get aware of the different products and the technical development of the world. In some schools, advertisement can help to get more funding especially in public schools where they are hard to find proper funding. Moreover, the encouraged advertisements such as toothpaste and shower-gel can bring awareness to the students. Furthermore, the some study tools and other magazines can introduce to the students for supporting studies.
On the other hand, these advertisements have a negative side which can sometime attract people and can make them addicted to the particular products especially young children. This can leads to less concentration on their studies and may more focus on the colourful advertisements campaigns which make them to fail in their studies and exam. For instance, these kind of children can be obsessed with money and in future they may involve in many crimes or illegal activities to gain money.
Advertisement have a great role in the fast growing world especially for the marketing businesses which can give both positive and negative impacts among children if the schools are entertaining these kind of activities in schools. So, for the better future of students teachers should monitor children's behaviour and choose appropriate advertisement to keep inside the school.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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...he advertisements attract the people and the marketing strategy in the business f...
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...y in the business field is increasing. Now a days, as part of the funding process public ...
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... the business field is increasing. Now a days, as part of the funding process public ...
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...ow it will help in childrens future. Advertisements have lots of positive sid...
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Message: Did you mean 'helps'?
Suggestion: helps
... for marketing and business purposes it help the people to get aware of the differen...
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Message: Did you mean 'same'?
Suggestion: same
...eness to the students. Furthermore, the some study tools and other magazines can int...
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...the students for supporting studies. On the other hand, these advertisements ...
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...cts especially young children. This can leads to less concentration on their studies ...
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... their studies and exam. For instance, these kind of children can be obsessed with money ...
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...hildren if the schools are entertaining these kind of activities in schools. So, for the b...
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Line 13, column 327, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to appropriate'
Suggestion: to appropriate
... monitor childrens behaviour and choose appropriate advertisement to keep inside the school...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, if, may, moreover, so, as to, for instance, kind of, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 10.5418719212 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 6.10837438424 229% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 15.0 8.36945812808 179% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 5.94088669951 101% => OK
Pronoun: 14.0 20.9802955665 67% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 31.9359605911 119% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 5.75862068966 122% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1639.0 1207.87684729 136% => OK
No of words: 305.0 242.827586207 126% => OK
Chars per words: 5.3737704918 5.00649968141 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17902490978 3.92707691288 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.03932834629 2.71678728327 112% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 139.433497537 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.518032786885 0.580463131201 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 498.6 379.143842365 132% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.57093596059 102% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.6157635468 87% => OK
Article: 2.0 1.56157635468 128% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.71428571429 58% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.931034482759 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 3.65517241379 55% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 12.6551724138 103% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.5024630542 112% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.1846582387 50.4703680194 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.076923077 104.977214359 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.4615384615 20.9669160288 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.07692307692 7.25397266985 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.12807881773 97% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.33497536946 244% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 6.9802955665 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 2.75862068966 72% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 2.91625615764 34% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.26127044129 0.242375264174 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0990791705596 0.0925447433944 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0549066572068 0.071462118173 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.172286799102 0.151781067708 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0445310672992 0.0609392437508 73% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 12.6369458128 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 53.1260098522 91% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.54236453202 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.9458128079 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.16 11.5310837438 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.45 8.32886699507 101% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 55.0591133005 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.94827586207 111% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.3980295567 108% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.5123152709 105% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 55.5555555556 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 50.0 Out of 90
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