Some say that music is as important as other subjects in schools to promote learning in children life. Do you agree or disagree? Give your opinion.

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Some say that music is as important as other subjects in schools to promote learning in children life. Do you agree or disagree? Give your opinion.

it is irrefutable to say that, music is important as other subjects in school. some people argue that music help children to widen their mental horizon, while others think the opposite to this. I intent to believe that music should be part of the subject that need to be learn in school. Following paragraphs will assert the advantages and disadvantages of the topic and deliver appropriate conclusion.

To begin with, music as an important subject will help our children build confidence in a way that they can express their feeling. Moreover, music can help children relax and unwind in their busy schedule. For instance, joining in music festival will be a great help in the learning process of the children. also, children may sometimes hard to express there feeling so they can convey it through singing or dancing. Thus, having this subject makes them flexible not only in literacy and numeracy but also in music.

On the other hand, having music as a subject can only be a destruction to some children. it can add on to their stress level during schools days. As an illustration, the time spent in practicing to singing or dancing can be there time to play and bond with friends. Therefore, some parents are not in favor of enrolling their kids in such curricular activities.

To recapitulate, I pen down saying that, music can be good in some children as long as they are willing to join or adopt it. I believe, we should take into consideration that music can help our children broaden their knowledge and learning.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, may, moreover, so, therefore, thus, while, for instance, to begin with, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 10.5418719212 95% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 6.10837438424 246% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 10.0 8.36945812808 119% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 5.94088669951 118% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 20.9802955665 138% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 38.0 31.9359605911 119% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 5.75862068966 87% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1271.0 1207.87684729 105% => OK
No of words: 263.0 242.827586207 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.83269961977 5.00649968141 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.02706775958 3.92707691288 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63067315304 2.71678728327 97% => OK
Unique words: 145.0 139.433497537 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.551330798479 0.580463131201 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 383.4 379.143842365 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.57093596059 95% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.6157635468 130% => OK
Article: 1.0 1.56157635468 64% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.71428571429 117% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.931034482759 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 3.65517241379 82% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 12.6551724138 119% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.5024630542 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 19.7209420555 50.4703680194 39% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 84.7333333333 104.977214359 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5333333333 20.9669160288 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.66666666667 7.25397266985 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.12807881773 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.33497536946 94% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 6.9802955665 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 2.75862068966 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 2.91625615764 34% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.254209332715 0.242375264174 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.104741686935 0.0925447433944 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0878445124845 0.071462118173 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.175602252277 0.151781067708 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.065106707741 0.0609392437508 107% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 12.6369458128 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 53.1260098522 118% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.54236453202 47% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.9458128079 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.44 11.5310837438 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.78 8.32886699507 93% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 55.0591133005 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.94827586207 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.3980295567 85% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.5123152709 86% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 55.5555555556 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 50.0 Out of 90
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