The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
Some people think that the best method to teach young people to become leaders is instilling in them a sense of cooperation. I believe that, however, we should not ignore the benefit of the competition.
First of all, competition could have some positive influence. In the ecosystem, many biologists support that species compete with each other as the driving force of adaption the environment and eventually evolution. The strong individual creatures will survive at the end of the competition, and continue their gene to the next generation. The entire species would become strong and strong by the method over time. As a result, the group could expand its territory and have many advantages to fight with other species in the limited resource.
The discussion of the social perspective, competition can promote development in many aspects of fields and improve efficiency. For example, the development of the semiconductor is very fast. Many companies want to dominate in this field, so they have intense competition with one another such as Samsung, TSMC, and Intel. Many great technologies have been created like 12 nano, 10 nano, 7 nano, and 3 nano processes in the couples of years. Thanks to the development of these technologies, we can make electronic products so small and let our society so convenience.
Besides, competition not only will promote social development but also stimulate individual potential. For instance, according to the research conducted by the department of sports in our country, athletes perform better in the game than they do when they practice. The phenomenon has been stimulating many scholars, starting to discuss what caused the state. In fact, the contributing factor is in the fact that people have much more crisis in the competition, and such sense could increase their body generate much more power to finish the tasks. This case is not rare. Many countries have the same studies. Such would be direct evidence that bears witness to the fact that competition really has some benefit to us.
However, we also cannot neglect the negative effect which causes by the competition. Wasting scarcity resource and the conflict of interest by competition will sometime make the entire world do downhill. Thus, how to find the balance between competition and cooperation is another very important issue to us, which we should not ignore.
In summary, cooperation and competition are having the same importance in our society. When we focus on how to teach our children to cooperate with one another, we should not forget the benefit which competition will bring to us.
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, however, really, so, still, thus, for example, for instance, in fact, in summary, such as, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 19.5258426966 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.4196629213 121% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 33.0505617978 91% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 58.6224719101 92% => OK
Nominalization: 31.0 12.9106741573 240% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2197.0 2235.4752809 98% => OK
No of words: 423.0 442.535393258 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.1938534279 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53508145475 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81792327064 2.79657885939 101% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 215.323595506 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.534278959811 0.4932671777 108% => OK
syllable_count: 686.7 704.065955056 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.2370786517 119% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.3545004965 60.3974514979 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.5416666667 118.986275619 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.625 23.4991977007 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.95833333333 5.21951772744 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 10.2758426966 165% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.128513710511 0.243740707755 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0330223067952 0.0831039109588 40% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0599382549996 0.0758088955206 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.073771848922 0.150359130593 49% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0845050279587 0.0667264976115 127% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 14.1392134831 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 48.8420337079 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 12.1639044944 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.47 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 100.480337079 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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