Playing computer games is a waste of time. Children should not be allowed to play them

We are on time and age, that a lot of inventions have been discovered, and one of them is the computer, which is a tool can help you in your work, to create projects and you can also have entertainment with it. Children are the first people who are using it as a time-consuming.

To begin with, we all know that computer's games have no benefits to the kids, but it is important for them to have fun, so, the parents should give them a specific time to play on it.

Scientific studies have proven that these products influence on child's focus, that because of his mind is busy with the game, then his brain will be tired to focus.

Also, lots of children waste their time on the games, so, they will not have enough time to study, and their marks and level will go down. And lots of games have horror scenes which make the children scared, for example, I knew a child who was playing and suddenly he screamed and he was scared, after that he became a patient with the scare.

In addition, the computer's games will take the kid from the outside world and he will be separated from it, and he will not have real friends to play with them, so, his ability to communicate will reduce, which this problem will create an introvert generation. Then they will be patients with mental diseases like Autism.

At the end of that argument, I showed a little of the effects of the computer's games on the kids, and it is important to say that childhood is the essential stage to collect pieces of information, to build their own brain with useful ideas, so, computer's games should have a limited time that permits the kid to play on it.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...re the first people who are using it as a time-consuming. To begin with, we all know that co...
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...nts with mental diseases like Autism. At the end of that argument, I showed a ...
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...ime that permits the kid to play on it.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, so, then, for example, in addition, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1341.0 1977.66487455 68% => OK
No of words: 302.0 407.700716846 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.44039735099 4.8611393121 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1687104957 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.3254205658 2.67179642975 87% => OK
Unique words: 153.0 212.727598566 72% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.506622516556 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 407.7 618.680645161 66% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 20.6003584229 44% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 33.0 20.1344086022 164% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 79.9027186299 48.9658058833 163% => OK
Chars per sentence: 149.0 100.406767564 148% => OK
Words per sentence: 33.5555555556 20.6045352989 163% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.88888888889 5.45110844103 145% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.53405017921 132% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.30181746342 0.236089414692 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.127713366432 0.076458572812 167% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0758239165187 0.0737576698707 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.160675028061 0.150856017488 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0762430303064 0.0645574589148 118% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.3 11.7677419355 139% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 63.36 58.1214874552 109% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 10.1575268817 124% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.06 10.9000537634 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.99 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 52.0 86.8835125448 60% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.2 10.0537634409 151% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200

Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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