Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Playing computer games is a waste of time. Children should not be allowed to play them.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
No one can deny that there are both positive and negative aspects of youngsters playing pc games. Certainly, some people if asked, might argue that playing computer games is not allowed to children, while others would say this question is not somewhat reliable in many cases due to plenty of factors. As far as I concerned that it is truly a waste of time and they can spend their time more beneficial things rather than sitting in front of the computer all the long. I feel this way for two core reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, sitting in front of the pc causes a lot of physical disorders such as fatigue, insomnia and those may lead them to have chronological diseases in their future life. In addition to this, more importantly, effects their mental health adversely and it brings plenty of negative consequences to our next generations. I have to admit that my opinion on this matter has been profoundly influenced by my own personal experience. my little brother will be 7 years old this year but he is relatively smaller than his peers and sometimes he acts like abnormally to others. one day my parents concerned that issue and we went to the doctor and he told us that pc games are mostly impacting on his mental state negatively and he warned us to stop him to doing it the following months. For the first time, he irritated with everything because we didn't acknowledge him what he wanted to do but the next months he interested in his previous favourite sports and completely changed than before both mentally and physically. Form this reason, I adopt the firm position that I will never allow my kids to play a computer game until they are grown-up.
Secondly, it grasps the friendships and childhood memories from children on account of the fact that they haven't any time to spend have relationships with their peers and other people even it is their family. childhood is the best memorable part of most of the people's life but at that time our children wasting their time playing any pc games it is not what we want for our offsprings. Furthermore, it doesn't give any knowledge to them because most of the games include violent, porno and any plus eighteen things which directly affect their discipline. my personal experience is a compelling example of this. my best childhood friend Boldoo has addicted to the computer games for a long time and since that time we haven't any connection between us because he hasn't enough time to spend with me so now we are no longer friends and I don't even know that he remembers me.
In summary, while various perspectives and viewpoints on this issue exist, I deeply assume that allowing to playing computers to your children brings a lot of negative results on their bright future such as terminal diseases and having no childhood memories or friends.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, if, may, second, secondly, so, while, i feel, in addition, in summary, such as, in many cases, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 84.0 43.0788530466 195% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2349.0 1977.66487455 119% => OK
No of words: 499.0 407.700716846 122% => OK
Chars per words: 4.70741482966 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72634191566 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58036090821 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 264.0 212.727598566 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.529058116232 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 725.4 618.680645161 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.1344086022 144% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 59.1035687071 48.9658058833 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 138.176470588 100.406767564 138% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.3529411765 20.6045352989 142% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.82352941176 5.45110844103 144% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.5376344086 217% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.226397525578 0.236089414692 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0709755909212 0.076458572812 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0489681656513 0.0737576698707 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.143246711331 0.150856017488 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0219152633978 0.0645574589148 34% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 11.7677419355 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.5 58.1214874552 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.63 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.27 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 86.8835125448 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.0537634409 135% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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