Argument Topic: The following appears in a letter to the editor for the West Lansburg News: "The tufted groundhog lives in the coastal wetlands of West Lansburg. Ancient records suggest that the tufted groundhog once numbered in the millions. Since they w

The author of the letter submitted to the West Lansburg News asserts that the West Lansburg council should not allow the riad to be built in along the edge of wetlands by the local development interests. Despite the assumptions made by the author are unfounded by certain levels, the argument made by the author that preserving the region's biodiversity is impossible if the natural regions are imputed seems to be viable. But, if more substantiations were done for his assumptions, then the persuasiveness of the conclusion would have been increased dramatically.

First and foremost, the author mentions about the ancient population of the groundhogs in the West Lansburg which is about a million. But, he fails to mentions what made their populations decrease so that the sanctuary was made to be built at that place. Despite the human aspects that leads to the endangering of the species, the natural aspects may too play a certain levels of roles in the decrease in numbers. Moreover, the groundhogs are being rared in the sanctuary. Why the road that is being built by locals affects them? If these aspects are included by the author to substantiate further more, then he could have come to the second conclusion.

Moreover, the endangering of other species by man's activities are being increasing in this contemporary world. For example, the number of sparrows are too being exponentially decreased by the telephonic waves being used by man. Similarly, if the man intrudes the natural life for his own needs then the ecological disturbance certainly takes place as a consequence of the decrease in the natural species. The author takes an example if the Eastern Carpenteria, where the sea otters' population is being decreased after the road was being built across their sanctuary. But the this makes a conjectural statement unless the author defines what are all the factors that caused that decrease. You can't simply blame the building roads are only ways that affects the population. Moreover, there is vast technological developments from 1978 to 2004, that makes sure no such intruding into animals' space takes place. Hence, such factors have to be re thought by the author.

Even though the author mentions that the local development interests are trying to persuade the West Lansburg council to permit to build the roads, the evaluation of their points has to be done. There is an absence of point by the author who fails to mentions why the road has to be built and how it's presence affect the 'health' of environment. Only the most viable reason can only be used to rethink if the road must be built or not else this assertion must be thought again.

In a nutshell, despite the author's definitive tone in the letter who expects the council not to allow the roads to be built across the sanctuary, he might hold water because of certain unfounded assumptions are being made by him. Using the given substantiations, even though the author might stay or come to the second conclusion, his assertion will have greater persuasiveness with more substantiations and explanations.

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Average: 5.5 (3 votes)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 333, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'regions'' or 'region's'?
Suggestion: regions'; region's
... made by the author that preserving the regions biodiversity is impossible if the natur...
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Line 3, column 152, Rule ID: TO_NON_BASE[1]
Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'mention'.
Suggestion: mention
...ch is about a million. But, he fails to mentions what made their populations decrease so...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 352, Rule ID: TOO_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'to play'?
Suggestion: to play
...of the species, the natural aspects may too play a certain levels of roles in the decrea...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 516, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...y the road that is being built by locals affects them? If these aspects are inclu...
^^
Line 5, column 476, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'otters'' or 'otter's'?
Suggestion: otters'; otter's
... the Eastern Carpenteria, where the sea otters population is being decreased after the...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 572, Rule ID: DT_DT[2]
Message: Maybe you need to remove the second determiner so that only 'the' or 'this' is left.
Suggestion: the; this
...being built across their sanctuary. But the this makes a conjectural statement unless th...
^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 693, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
... factors that caused that decrease. You cant simply blame the building roads are onl...
^^^^
Line 7, column 129, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'building'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'permit' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: building
...ade the West Lansburg council to permit to build the roads, the evaluation of their poin...
^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 252, Rule ID: TO_NON_BASE[1]
Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'mention'.
Suggestion: mention
...nce of point by the author who fails to mentions why the road has to be built and how it...
^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, hence, if, may, moreover, second, similarly, so, then, as to, for example

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 38.0 19.6327345309 194% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 28.8173652695 97% => OK
Preposition: 67.0 55.5748502994 121% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2582.0 2260.96107784 114% => OK
No of words: 515.0 441.139720559 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.01359223301 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.763781212 4.56307096286 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82459472768 2.78398813304 101% => OK
Unique words: 239.0 204.123752495 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.464077669903 0.468620217663 99% => OK
syllable_count: 782.1 705.55239521 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.6554762786 57.8364921388 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.363636364 119.503703932 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.4090909091 23.324526521 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.86363636364 5.70786347227 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.25449101796 171% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.67664670659 192% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0853539887308 0.218282227539 39% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0309273000102 0.0743258471296 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.059183900511 0.0701772020484 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0592635446208 0.128457276422 46% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0499282444091 0.0628817314937 79% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 14.3799401198 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 48.3550499002 117% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 12.5979740519 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.12 8.32208582834 98% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 98.500998004 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 12.3882235529 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 22 15
No. of Words: 515 350
No. of Characters: 2530 1500
No. of Different Words: 228 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.764 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.913 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.744 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 166 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 129 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 87 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 60 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.409 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.222 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.727 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.316 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.5 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.104 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5